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complexities in distance




her presence was emphasised by scent,
that played dignity on lips and rose marks.

inspiration hit subtly
with willpower
that energised veins
and turned battery into breath.

light flirted with obscurity,
eventually winning heart of depression,
showing empty highways
to custom journeys.

 

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sorrow held harpsichord strings
captive in his eyes
like the moth-candle legend,
her inspiration succumbed

to the concept of
breathe in-breathe out

for the hourglass on his desk
kept track of sand particles
gone from her
like the color of hair


-


they collected bits of gravity
from each other’s pocket, from

afar.






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  • Bungalow Bill
    May 21, 2008
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    Wow!

    Loved this, one of the best I've read in a while


  • HoneyFire
    May 20, 2008
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    again you have some serious thoughts here. great job!


  • chloris
    May 19, 2008

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    8319037171717

    are we scoring you???


    i love those numbers.
    two of my fav people. loved how it ended


  • Tangled Angle
    May 17, 2008
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    3.0

    Good

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    May 17, 2008
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    some great images in here.

    (quick comment, sorry)

    4.


  • W a s p
    May 17, 2008
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    EH!MMMMMMM! WOT, I wish you would write in English! I'm also worried about that poor moth...ian.


  • lively banter
    May 17, 2008
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    good work ladies


  • Dienush
    May 17, 2008
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    Yay you posted it. Wow we did it so fast You're good.

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