I can't seem to believe that you ever cared for me,
Your empty words drift away as fragile whispers.
I saw the day when the love left your eyes,
Your tongue fell still your treason is silence.
Please try to say more carefully that you no longer need me,
This cruel back and forth is tearing apart my faith.
The only eyes you'll look into is your mirrored facade reflection,
You are the solely means to my love deprived end.
"Take every love away from me silent angel."
Apathy cries out from my lungs,
Indifference reeks of fiction.
Time will tell how long will I endure.
Now I run and hide excluding such complacence.
As tears rain from my bloodshot eyes.
I feel the sorrowful pull of my deprivation.
Leaves me nothing to remind me of this love now lost.
I wander in the ambiance of my depression.
The air now reeks with the presence of my vile voice.
My smile masks the withering of my heart.
I am not your trophy, I am nobodies trophy,
Yet I still crave for that love.
Author notes
my AP name is LoveDeprived, this contest wants something about the author well my ap name is connected to me explaining my ap name is also explaining something about me so enjoy and i hope you like it.
A contest entry
- Your AP name explained. by Xombii.
440 points, ended May 18, 2008, 15 entries
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Comments
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Good job! :)
beautifully written. well deserved trophy.
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welldone. i loved the way this was written. so much behind it.
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wow. this actually made my stomach hurt. the pain being endured. i cant even pick out my favorite part! its all so amazing!
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mmmm this is riddled with lovely lines and personal depth.
I like.
nice write.
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this caught my attention...
this is just my favorite line
Your empty words drift away as fragile whispers
maybe because I've been experiencing the same way
and the words hit me like "ouch"
as the cliche goes...in love
actions really do speak louder than words
but we need both
one is not enough without the other
or as your AP name speaks
it would be LoveDeprived
this is really deep
Anna Lee
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this is really deep, and i really liked your usage of metaphors especially this one:
Your empty words drift away as fragile whispers
i could absolutly just picture it. wonderfully done -
I can feel this from the bottom of my heart to the depths of my soul. I can relate to this. Good job and good luck!
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GREATLY AMAZED
AMAZED I AM!THIS IS TERRIFIC!GOOD LUCK IN MY CONTEST!~
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wonderful
Wow, this was amazing! Every word in here brought out the pain, angst, and frustration in your heart and mind. I wish so much to be able to show this to some people! I have never read a poem that has expressed my thoughts/emotions more clearly than this one.
Beautiful job
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This is grand ^.^
I'm glad the idea caught your interest.
This is worded beautifully, and it flows well.
That single line... is well... captivating.
Thank you for entering.
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wowe...
You explained your name alright... nice work... filled with dark sorrow! Brilliant write! i love that single line the lingers between two amazing stanzas.. awesome once again!
Keep penning kayz! hope to read more...
~Ranji
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