I've walked a million miles
Learned many a lessons
But every thing I have learned
Comes back to you
Though you shattered my heart
I would walk right back
To the day
You cheated and lied to me
In my heart I know
This is right
Even though everyone disagrees
My soul says yes
I just want to let you know
I would turn back the hands of time
If that meant
I could have you here one last time
Author notes
Here- Rascal Flatts
A contest entry
- Love Song Inspired. by Poetryintheblood.
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Comments
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adorable
This poem was short, sweet, and to the point. I've had a lot of longer entries, and I think this might have actually been my quickest read. I'm sort of grateful for that because everytime I check, I have a new entry! Either way, it was just what I was looking for. I really liked this, it was absolutely adorable. It was also really well written -good luck! -
This was a moving piece. Nice write.
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Let me start with a pet peeve that I have.
When the first word in every line is capitalized, it signals
my brain that a new (complete) thought is about to begin.
In this particular poem the lack of any punctuation adds
to the dilemma. It doesn't mean it has to punctuated like
sentences and paragraphs, a few well placed commas would do fine.
Line 2 'lessons' should be singular.
The piece is overly cliched, work some metaphors or similes into
the poem. I'm sorry if I sound harsh, but I hope this will be helpful.
I wish people had been more straight forward with me much sooner.Thank you for entering.
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Thank you for your lovely entry and song choice, good luck in my contest, Josie
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Excellent Poem
I liked your poem it was well thought out and come from the heart and thats what i think matters is when it comes from the heart it is a true poem.
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i thought i commented this.
Anyways
i like it
..Simply Me♥
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