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La Volta

 

Honeyed light pours through doors

like pain from open wounds.

But, no faithless believer, she;

while ladies promenade before her,

mind drifts to memories made.

 

Rhythms of the night before

bring mysterious butterflies of the soul.

Love comes, incremental over time,

in this courtship under stars.

 

With each dance they age

until years are counted

as seventy-seven heavens

lived in denial, loyalty,

and responsibility's hell.

 

Hearts never bankrupt

by whiskey breath

or fevers raging,

he lifts her one last time;

an offering to the lesser gods

who only in death

could separate love

and lover.

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Inspired by The La Volta:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gmaePS9WhJ8

"Dances" requested:
Faithless believer - penciledlives
Courtship under the stars - azure85
Incremental - ea
seventy-seven heavens - penciledlives
honeyed light pours through the doors - pania
Bankrupt - Pamela A. Lamppa
The rhythm of the night - azure85
promenade - judyjudyjudy
mysterious butterflies of the soul - Aerden
whiskey breath - judyjudyjudy


My Dance Card:

Comfortably unhappy (reserved)
Lemons by the foot
Wild raspberries (reserved)
Reaching insanity's shores
Candlelight shadows (reserved)
Day 2 list:
Inside every tragedy (reserved)
Candied lips (reserved)
Scientific failures (reserved)
Fresh-squeezed (reserved)
Coke and ice cream for breakfast (reserved)
Day 3 list:
Felt with my eyes (reserved)
Waiting on forever
Grandma's China (reserved)
Dream-catcher
Plastic knives
Day 4 list:
Skim milk blahs
Discrete caress
Antique lace (reserved)
Please pass the aspirin (reserved)
Boys snapping bras (reserved)
Day 5 list:
Diet Pepsi for me, please
Slogging
Dandelion wine
Sunflower seeds
Gifts of grace



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  • LadyDementia gold member
    July 20

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    Wow, a beautifully penned piece. 'Honeyed light pours through doors' a fantastic invite to the rest of the poem. I'm a little confused by the contest but your end result is stunning. So pleased I read this, thanks for sharing and I hope your well


    • trista gold member
      July 20

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      Hi Pink,

      Thanks for stopping by to read and comment, and TY also for the applause! I don't know if I'm doing "well" exactly, but at least "better". LOL

      The contest looks more confusing than it was...basically each of us wrote out 5 or so short phrases or words each day, then picked out ones we wanted to use from the other's lists, as many or as few as we wanted. Each phrase could only be used by one person, so first come, first served! It was reserved by asking for a "dance". ea comes up with some very creative and fun contests and this was no exception! Anyway, in whatever way it came to be, I'm glad you liked the end result.

      Hope you''re doing good (or at least okay, lol) too!

      Love and s
      ~J.

      • LadyDementia gold member
        July 21
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        Sounds like a fab idea for a contest, very inspiring for the writers entering....The end result is awesome, just read again Not to bad here. drawing ever closer to the trial Pleased you doing well, tho your comment on my poem did make me wonder I hope you never have to go through that again...ouch! Take care hunni

  • pania gold member
    May 25
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    So bittersweet, I love seventy-seven heavens. Thank you for the dance.

  • ea silver member
    May 25

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    This is a touching write - it gives me the feeling of the sometimes hard realities that must go into reaching the 75th DIAMOND aniversary (or higher, if I think of the possibilities of 77 heavens, which I thought was a very intriguing prompt to offer and to pick; wonder what it comes from.) Thank you for coming out for this dance with this bittersweet poem. It does speak to me of a country dance and the mood of so many country tunes.


    • trista gold member
      May 25
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      Hi ea,

      Thanks for the comment, applause, and the HM! I loved the "seventy-seven heavens" phrase, wanted to build the poem around that...but it just wouldn't come to me like I wanted. I think I'll stick it in my back pocket and maybe use it as a prompt again in the future, if penciledlives doesn't mind. Writing has been a huge challenge for me lately, so really I'm just glad I could finish what I started.

      This was a lot of fun; ty for hosting and the creativity you put into each one of your contests!


      ~J.
  • judyjudyjudy
    May 22
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    boys snapping bras - May I have this dance?
  • judyjudyjudy
    May 21
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    Inside every tragedy - May I have this dance?

    • trista gold member
      May 23
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      You may. Sorry I'm so late getting back to you...had to make a trip to the buffet table for some spiked punch.

  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    May 20
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    oooh May I have this dance? Antique lace
  • judyjudyjudy
    May 20
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    please pass the aspirin - May I have this dance?

  • Aerden gold member
    May 19
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    May I have this dance? Felt with my eyes.
  • judyjudyjudy
    May 19
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    Grandma's China - May I have this dance?

  • ea silver member
    May 19
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    Hi Trista,
    It's fun imagining how your poem will take shape with these few glimpses I have had of your dance over the past two days. Here's the tune we're dancing to: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zcyAwI95iiQ

    • trista gold member
      May 20
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      I loved the music, ea! I've added it to one of my youtube playlists and look forward to checking out more of their tunes. Thanks for sharing!


      P.S. The contest has been great fun so far, just as I knew it would be. But, I have NO idea how I'm going to string all my "inspirations" together yet!

      • ea silver member
        May 20
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        OMG - you have made my day!!! You'll have to check out David's other band on there; I'll send some links.

        • trista gold member
          May 20
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          Yes, please do! It's very different from what I normally listen to, but it reminded me of the kinds of songs my parents sang when I was little.

  • Aerden gold member
    May 18
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    Ah....Someone who knows a medieval/Renaissance dance or two!

    • trista gold member
      May 18
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      Know? Yes. Able to dance? Unfortunately, definitely, not.

      • ea silver member
        May 19
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        Ooo, yes, I love your dance choice! ♥
  • judyjudyjudy
    May 18
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    Fresh-squeezed - may I have this dance?

  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    May 18
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    oooh, may I have this dance? Coke and ice cream for breakfast

  • pania gold member
    May 17
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    May I have this dance? - candied lips

  • penciledlives
    May 17
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    May I have this dance?

    Scientific failures

  • penciledlives
    May 17
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    May I have this dance?

    Comfortably unhappy

  • pania gold member
    May 17
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    May I have this dance? - wild raspberries

  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    May 17
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    May I have this dance? - Candlelight shadows

  • Quiet places gold member
    May 16
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    Excellent!!

    Love the emotion and imagery in this write! Leaves the reader to ponder on many dreams. Don


    • trista gold member
      May 16
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      Let's hope that is true when I write the poem!

      If you've never joined one of ea's Victorian Parlor games, take a look...they are tons of fun, and any one of the lines I have here can be "reserved" to use in a poem of your own.

      Glad you could stop by...it's been a while!

      ~J.

      • Quiet places gold member
        May 16
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        Thought this was the poem! LOL It's still unique!! I always love what you write Julie!!!

        • trista gold member
          May 16
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          TY for the compliment! Actually...I've been writing very, very little. Muse seems to be on an extended vacation. Maybe I'm on to something if this seemed like it could be a poem!

          • Quiet places gold member
            May 16
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            It's the music of a lover's thoughts! Read it again and ponder on the way one may be in a love dream state of mind.

            • trista gold member
              May 17
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              Haha...I think you're right...I probably could turn this into a poem! I'll think on it. If nothing else, you've given me a big smile tonight, and I needed that.

              s
              ~J.
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