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A Time in Place

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We do not hear the sounds,

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nor see a face,

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or walk in the time

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of that ancient place. 

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Yet we bear witness,

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we are the living trace

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of souls inhabiting

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a time in that place. 

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An honored time ~

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never to be erased.

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....

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My attempt at minimalism.

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  • ecrivain01
    July 11

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    Interesting ...

    that this poem somewhat mirrors the one I posted earlier. (Except that you posted yours first.)

    Strange that we seem to have been thinking in parallel on this.

    Anyway, nice job and nicely done.


  • Jesann gold member
    June 7

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    Great title ...with such beautiful thoughts in your poem.
    Beautifully penned.
    Very well done.


  • PerVirtuous
    May 26

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    I call it milism. Isn't that appropriate? Such a concept should not have a five syllable name! I love the sentiments.

    we are the living trace
    of souls inhabiting
    a time in that place.

    Wouldn't it be "that time and this place"? What other place is there? I think you mean to use "that place" to refer to a time period, but you have used time in that line already. It confuses my little mind. I think I know what you mean. But you make me work at it. Another lovely poem.


  • Venugopal gold member
    March 29

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    beauty of time is it never turns back. In real sence there is no time, but we create by our activities. Thought provoking poem friend


    • Cynthia Gaines gold member
      March 29
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      Thank you!!

      I appreciate your stopping in to read my work. Your thoughtful comments really mean a lot!! Take care, xx Cyn

  • sleepinglion
    February 21

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    Almost time travel

    I love that ,- we are the living trace of souls inhabiting a time in that place. It is good to be able to feel that we do that. To have a sense of history, but also to understand that time has past and cannot be recaptured

  • patrick20traveler
    January 27

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    This is a very well written piece. Your style here has a quality of ease--you make it seem easy, yet elegant. Good write.


  • Snowing Kisses gold member
    December 27, 2008

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    this is a very elegant little gem, its true the best things come in small packages
    thanks for sharing


  • Heath Thompson
    December 13, 2008
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    I admire anyone who can write in rhyme as well as this - I can't do it to save my life!


  • Lexana
    December 7, 2008
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    lovely write I very much enjoyed this


  • Jesann gold member
    November 17, 2008
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    Wonderful..I really like this write.
    "An honored time ~
    never to be erased"
    Perfect !!

  • bowmore bill
    October 7, 2008
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    simply the best

    It may be minmal, but it is full of meaning.
    up to your usual standard Rose.


  • Lady Ireland gold member
    October 5, 2008

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    you have achived your atempt my dear,
    this is lovely, i liked it very much. where do you get this from?? your one of the best on this site for sure...
    Slán
    Dolores xx


  • csmmoms2
    September 20, 2008
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    Really lovely


  • Riamh
    August 28, 2008

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    This poem oozes elegance and grace. A wonderful, refreshing, easy to read piece. Very well done. I take my hat off to you!
    Slán
    Slayer


  • JinSays gold member
    August 21, 2008

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    this is fantastic, and oh so hard for me
    You did a wonderful thing with this. Minimalism is so difficult, but Im trying.
    Your poem told a story, all the way around. Make me want to do something in this way.
    best,
    jin


  • IansCyberspace silver member
    August 21, 2008

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    minimalistic poetry

    The unique feature of this short poem is each line provides a quick visual, to be put together at the end as one complete picture. We are the expression of those who've gone before us in history.

  • bowmore bill
    July 19, 2008

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    mystical

    loved it, contrary to popular opinion there are those
    who inhabit two levels of conciousness, able to communicate with not only the past, but also the future.
    P. you look like a true celt.


  • myrataal silver member
    June 20, 2008

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    Ah, I love minimalistic poetry!

    I am so inspired by your words and picture ...

    there is a broken rail
    where memories fail
    to grasp
    the loss

    Love to you
    Myra

  • John Clark
    June 16, 2008
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    good

    needs to be longer.


  • leopardleaf
    June 6, 2008

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    I loved it! I personally love history and for me this poem captured why I love it so much Loved lines 6, 7 and 8


  • arafura gold member
    June 4, 2008

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    I think you have grasped the concept of minimalism well. If you want to really see minimalism at work check out how Hemingway used the language and how he pared everything down. Great work poet!


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    May 31, 2008

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    has a since of loneliness about it, yet leaves me feeling at peace...for in the foot steps of this place we may never be seen yet the es-scents of who we are will always remain never to be erased...sighs...a comfortable read dear sister


    • Cynthia Gaines gold member
      May 31, 2008
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      Thank you...

      Your thoughtful words always inspire me to reach hiugher, Sis. Peace, Yellow Moon


  • Rovingone gold member
    May 27, 2008

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    Those are wonderful words. You speak volums in just a few lines. Like when you visit a sacred, or historical place and feel all the stories that went on there. I like the way you did this. Great!


  • Lowell Poe
    May 24, 2008

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    Its part of the circle.
    There is a van morrison song that came to mind...this would be perfect as a written introduction to it, the song is ....Haunts of Ancient Peace.....see if you can find it...you really will think the same thing.
    Im listing to the Chieftains right now and your poem went perfect with a slow musical rendition of ........Carrickfergus....

    A timeless piece of poetry.
    The ghost of our past would be proud of the recognition.

    GREAT JOB CYN,
    LOWELL


    • Cynthia Gaines gold member
      May 31, 2008
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      Thank you...

      I'll have to go look that one up now, you always inspire me to reach higher, Lowell. Thank you. Peace, Cyn


  • DeepBreath
    May 18, 2008

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    so good

    I dont know why but this reminds me of my mother, her fragileness and her strong memory, she passed away a year ago and its still really hard but this gave me a peaceful feeling.


  • Kathleen a Nazarene
    May 17, 2008

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    Captivating!

    If this is an attempt then you've succeeded tremendously!
    This evokes thoughts of the witnesses who've gone before & given their testimony. I'm a Bible Scholar, which I'm rather thinking you are as well by the tone of this piece. I salute you poet!


  • Mat Larkin
    May 17, 2008

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    Well done...

    Don't know much about minimalism.. (had trouble spelling it just now) But like the comment below, I felt the same sense of reverence for hallowed ground..and time. Mat


  • FransB gold member
    May 17, 2008

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    Wonderful

    While reading one has this thought of 'tread softly', as you are on 'holy ground'. Can one read and feel reverence? Well, I have just expereience this. Frans


  • Quiet places
    May 16, 2008

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    Outstanding!!

    Fantastic choice of wording in this poem. Sets the mind on an interesting journey of thought. I love it! Don

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