Lashes fold together
Sealed like an envelope
Encasing ones fate
With pale lids
Covering my vision
I travel back in time
Life flashes before me
In an instant
Like it was never there at all
A contest entry
- 2 hour contest - Metaphor/Free Verse by Tangled Angle.
450 points, ended May 17, 2008, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Blink by Tigris.
450 points, ended June 8, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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The last stanza is beautiful. It sometimes feels that way after time as past, like it never really happen. Thank for your entry.
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sometimes i dont think you need to know what the memory is... i thought this was good.. and what i get is there was a memory that maybe you dont want to share but that it brought you back in time.... good luck in contest i think its wonderful...!!!! hope you feel better soon...! hugs
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I like your opening image, but the overall poem itself lacks specification; it's too vague, so I couldn't really relate. You have a good idea, but it just needs more extension. What exactly was the memory? You wrote about having the flashback but didn't show what the flashback was. What you have here is a good start though.
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I'll see what I can do in a day or so. Right now I am an emotional wreck.
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I really like this one!!
Best wishes in the contest!
Write on...
*PEACE*
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