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Pain For A Reason

Bloody wrist
Bloody wrist
Salt, ice, and vinegar
Watch it burn
Hear your scream
Feel the pain
and releif
Hands on neck
Its hard to breathe
I hear no screams
I feel no pain no more

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  • broken-angel
    May 27
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    good write hun...keep it up xx
  • bleadingheart
    May 18

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    omg r u my longlost twin? this is so true for my life to! i hope ur doing ok tho u write really good poetry so keep em coming

  • LionessK Greeters member
    May 17
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    welcome to allpoetry

    This has a really great rhythm to it. A sad feeling to express... though even more sad is how many can relate to and feel each word. You have an excellent poem here, I hope you keep writing. It is a great way to vent and express yourself... without the scars.
    My best to you.


    ~Kristy

  • BloodSuckingAngel
    May 17
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    nice......cool write gave me shivers


  • BlackFlames
    May 16
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    Great write Kaitlin! Now you need the Hatred/Agony/Bloody one from class!!!


  • crazymomma
    May 16

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    Dark and very vivid imagery. I do think in the last line you should say I feel no more pain or I feel pain no more. But the message comes through anyway


  • Sound of Madness
    May 16
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    Wow, that sounds very painful. Pain lets us know we're alive I suppose. Good write.
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