Placed on your pedestal
You rendered me unreachable
Solitary became my soul
I fall forward
to beckoning blackness
Free me...
Author notes
Prompt: Pic, 20 words
(It must be a lonely place being placed on a pedestal.. we're all human...)
In a list
A contest entry
- PIF SEMI-QUICKIE 8/20! by Valley Girl.
300 points, ended May 17, 6 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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excellent
What a great creation. So very well done. Congratulations on the bronze.
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I so thought I commented on this, maybe I just read it
It is awesome SiS, just so amazing how deep you go with so little words
Cin
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great
This is something I've never seemed to be able to do: pack so much power into so few words. This was great. Thank you for this.
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I am constantly amazed by you. To be able to express so much in so few words is a gift for which you have my eternal envy. I love the loneliness in this and the yearning...excellent.
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I love your words here. I love the pic also. Congrats on the bronze. Keep up the great work.
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Weaving wonder yet again
for all the
lovers
of your work
and the many future fans!!!
Grats on the bronze cup!!!!
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Congrats to you on your bronze sis! A great write.
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And here I thought I was an
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hmmmmm ... human? heh
HUMAN? heh
Telekinesis will save the day ... as it can be used to keep you upon said pedestal or drift you down safely.
But, I'd say, if you want to be free, be proactive, free yourself from the restraints of the pedestal.
Congrats on da bronze!
Steve
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.......Speechless!! Funny how you render me this way alot!!! Congrats on the shiney!!! Absolutely deserved!!!
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I looked at the prompt and nothing came to my mind...you look at the prompt and...well, I'm lost for words...
You've done it again...all the best in the contest...Sue
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Wonderful first read of the day Mind if it were me up there I'd be more worried about the height than being alone
A fantastic piece hun, you really have these down to a fine art. Good luck in the contest
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You have mastered short poetry Jacks, and this is a fine example hon, best of luck in the contest.
Love and peace always,
mj.
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wo auntie this is great
i love you -
I but placed you there
so we could share
the beauty of your soul,
but if you're not happy
just make it snappy
and shimmy down that pole.
I will be down here
to catch you my dear
if you should fall.
I know I'm odd
and I love your bod
for you I give my all.
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lol.. cute!!
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Great take! Wow, I love this, so true. Good luck in the contest!
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You really did a great job with the picture, so apt, all I can say is great job, Love John
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Great take on the pic--Excellent imagery within your 20 words!!
Well Done & Good Luck!
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Such a sad write. I really like the feeling with this write, how the girl wants to be free, to be removed off of her lover's pedestal. Great take on the prompt. Thank you for entering, and best of luck in the contest.
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this is a really good poem!
Good Luck in the contest..jeje
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well expressed hun. though i cant relate to it, i thought it very powerful. wish you the best for the contest
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Your words are always stunning. Great write again my dear! Best of luck to you.
Linda
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Pedestals are evil, evil I tell you! They distance us from the world and although that is sometimes for the better it is not something one would want forever. Beautiful write as always.
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Good take.
Can be so true.
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It is but truly a lonely place and also one were expectations are never met. A lovely piece of sadness presented in its brevity.
Good luck
Des
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