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Below the afghan, one sofa, softly red
speechless two, one clock only tocking.
Thoughts parallel from toe to head,
lost between covers, thickened plots mocking.
Contentment ensconced, the afternoon lazes.
Kitty floats the floor to an all day diner.
Shadows slow dance across sun-striped pages,
increases cracks and textures russet binders.
Pages deepen, laden lids wander wavy
as fingers descend to distract and linger.
Letters march on orders - heavy and hazy;
legs slip legs while toes tip in ginger.
He peers over Cummings as she peaks over Poe,
they adore from silent worlds, pause, then let go.
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Author notes
Prompt #1. Quiet Delight
In a list
A contest entry
- Free Rein - with Hints... by RedAquarius.
425 points, ended May 29, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Super Quick PW by Blooming Poet.
300 points, ended May 31, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I love this, Paul. You paint a picture of poetry paradise!
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Thank you Joyce.
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kitty is now....immortal
what a wonderful sonnet this is!
i especially love the last two lines.
lane
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Thank you Lane. I'm quite fond of this one too.
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This is soft and beautiful
I do not know forms that good
But I think this is a sonnet.
Love the flow and rhyme.
Riftkin
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Yes this is a sonnet. Thank you for your comment.
Paul
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Outstanding!
This is hands down an incredible write! Wonderful imagery and the partial rhymes are thoroughly enjoyable. This is my favorite line: "He peers over Cummings as she peaks over Poe," Was 'peaks' intentional? If so, she really enjoys Edgar Allen... hmmmm.
Wonderful vision of two literary folks in love! Keep your pen to the page and good luck in the contest!
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Thank you SO much for this comment, and, yes, you are the first to notice my double meaning in the word peaks (vs. peeks). I pay very close attention to my spelling so there was no error. You're quite perceptive.
Paul
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This is very creative so full of meaning and uniqineness in every way. Great rhyming also not too forced.
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Absolutely Maahvahlous!!!
What an awesome poem!!! Words fail me just now, as I've been up most of the night waiting for news and then welcoming a new grandbaby into the family. Glad to see you've snagged an HM for Poetically Yours, although I'd say this is worthy of much more!!! Take care, Peace, Cyn 
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Thank you so much Rose, I'm glad you enjoyed this. Congratulations on what, by this time, must be a birth of a grandchild.
Is it a boy? Is there a name? C'mon, details...
Paul
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How lovely, with such a subtle enhancing rhyme. Sensual images of languid love.
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Thank you Star Shine for your comment.
Paul
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Excels!
Reading between the lines can be such fun, and I'm not a bit surprised that he peers over Cummings. The world can't have enough of these moments, contentment ensconced, to suit me. You know you're reading a good poem when you realize your are smiling and didn't know when it began.
Loved this! ~KL
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Love the title and the lazy feel of comfortable love your created in it.Beautiful writing here.
good luck
Becky
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I thought this was lovely, a smooth flow and a wonderful description of a comfortable and loving couple, enjoying their own love and the love of books. I have to say the best part, for me, is that final couplet - it just seals all this nicely in a pretty bow and says, love me. Thanks for entering the contest and good luck!
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Bravo!
Oh my oh my oh my. Beautifully done. I loved the turned phrases and stanza three depicts the quiet moment delightfully. Such soft visions presented in this lovely sonnet.
I just felt good after reading this. Best of luck in this contest. I am certain you will do very well, I can't imagine anything else.
Impressive work. Well done my friend. ~Pamela 
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Thank you Pam. I learned a lot from my sonnet entry in the NO GREENS contest. That one felt good so I thought I'd try another.
Thank you so much for the extensive accolades. You're a gem.
Paul
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WOW!!!!
i love it!
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Thank you for your exclamatory comment, da!
Paul
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Some poems are simply delicious. This is one of them...Love, Lane
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Wow... the ending of this is simply brilliant (but it was the first two lines that captured my attention so quickly and so well)... I really like how you have created this poem, it speaks so clearly of a perfect afternoon just the thing to daydream about! Good luck in the contest!
Keep writing
Polly
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Thank you Polly. I was wondering if the ending was ok, strong enough. I guess it's good the way it is and you understood the meaning. I kind of like leaving endings to trail off into the imagination.
Paul
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wow - this has an incredible flow & rhythm...a beautiful sonnet
and a beautiful moment shared (& couch..lol) here between two
and I love the title...
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You're so kind. Thank you for that comment on this poem Tara.
Paul
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really nice feel to this, like a lazy afternoon
good luck in the contest
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Thank you dear writer for reading.
Paul
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paulcreates
Excellent Sonnet Dear, I like how you reversed some of the sayings such as toe to head lol. Excellent imagery Looks like a Gold winner to me Good luck
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Thank you for your comment.
Paul
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