Your delicate move
upon my breast
gave away
with the breeze
across my nape of neck
I hear you whisper
my Name, deep inside
but you must climb
within, to unlock
that key
That only you hold
within your heart
dining me in diamonds
and a field of dreams
where we play among'st
the lion and lambs
now that harmony
has found the fill.
Come dear, unlock
my key so I may be
the one that restores
to you all stars and
meter's roar.
We have so much in store
as you breathe across
my neck, wanting more.
A contest entry
- gentleness: by Nicolette.
950 points, ended June 1, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Is this believable
Comments
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This is lovely and has a wonderful sense of intimacy and soft sensuality about it. The occasional rhyme worked well too... adds a singing quality to this poem.
Anybody who approaches a woman this lovingly and gently definately holds the key to her heart. Thank you for a lovely entry, Tamara. Well done.
~ Nicolette
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Very gently sensuous. I LOVE the next to the last stanza! A great phrase. I also like the first one because it sets the mood so well. critical: Did you mean "writhing" when you said, "withing to unlock?"
Good luck, dear, in the contest. ~ Joyce
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Your word spill a river of gentleness dear friend and its flow is great. Bravo!
~Sonja~
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thank you Sonja where have you been hiding? I have missed you so....
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