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Deadweight Heart

The candle of hope is melting away
The wax seeps between my fingers
Because I’ve yet to find the strength
To finally snuff it out like I should have
And bring that idiotic fantasy to an end

Everything just feels so much heavier now
Even unconsciousness is emptier than before
For so long the dreams have ceased
Where I used to reach for your ethereal hand
All replaced by black, necrotic sleep

Unravel my veins until the end of days
You will not find a single inch
That isn’t awash with ice and leaden dark
Viscous strings of mouldering blood pump from me
All to the monotone beat of my deadweight heart

All this chaos is disolving me
Weathering me down again

Perhaps i've done the gravest sin

To want an angel all to myself

Is this why i cradle the candle still?

In hope that her flame may brand itself into my skin.

Author notes

Added a little more this morning. I am the most shameless fool in the world.

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  • aidenspektor
    July 17, 2008

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    "Where I used to reach for your ethereal hand
    All replaced by black, necrotic sleep"
    Epic lines. I really like this one. You're very verbose, great word choice, great flow.


  • SaMmYBabY
    May 20, 2008
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    I like it!!!!!


  • Rose Dark Thorn silver member
    May 17, 2008

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    Reminds me of how I've been feeling lately, though for different reasons than what this poem states. You describe it well.


  • Wings of Insanity
    May 16, 2008

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    this is very good, i like it alot, means alot to me to, kinda explains what im feeling right now, but im just trying to tell myse;f its not


  • Lost Vampyre Angel
    May 16, 2008

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    ooh wow you nailed how i feel right now,
    apart from i feel more sucicidal too,
    i love this poem, its soo good, i love the structure,
    and rhythem..
    best of luck,
    love ya,
    xxx kitty

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