when i look into your eyes......
i see a forgotten lost soul...
when i touch your skin.....
there is nothing but a bitter cold....
when i reach for your hand.....
its feels like stone...
but when i realize your nothing but a statue.....
i truley feel alone....
all i ask is to be honest......
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yeah i always put those there lol....... its just the way that i write on the computer lol.....
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Statues are so... sad. If a statue was ever made of someone I once loved I don't think i could face it.
I like your thoughtfulness in this though, it's touching. I also see you like ellipses XD
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uh.... i feel kinda stupid asking but what are ellipses?....
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ellipses... are... three periods in a row, otherwise expressed with --, or ***
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what a lovely poem - it smiles so much -
when i reach for your hand...
fingers capture silence and make music
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well thank you for your comment lol.... that was my intesion lol..
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Totally mesmerizing! I was left holding the hand of stone when I finish reading you....Your poetic pattern is awesome....loved it!...
novy
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I like the way you write it gives off such powerful emotional waves its beautiful. Great Write Rave
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well thank ya lol....
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Awe good job and the ending threw me
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This is good
Awe it drew me right in and this is one to make you think of the ones we meet and at times you walk away with tears for you know they are noty feeling the love they so deserve
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Wow, this is chilling, it has a really strong emotional effect. Very creative, and such a desolate feeling at the end. Well done!
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thank you... thats what i was going for lol....
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