Deceit is your name
you play your game
Drawing me in
where I've already been
I believed in you
thought your word was true
The games always the same
was it you or me to blame
You have no spine
it's up to me to draw the line
No more of this I say
we need to go our own way
Looking back at what it cost
letting go of what we lost
The price might seem high to pay
but we could be better people one day
Now's the time to walk
the time has ended for talk
Author notes
I'm moving on and leaving this dark cloud behind me
A contest entry
- PW Party by Blooming Poet.
425 points, ended July 23, 2008, 117 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Moving On by The Rainbows Mind.
1050 points, ended September 11, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This one hits close to home for me.
It's not your fault, but the image won't do much for me because I'm blind and cannot see, however the content provided was excellent.
As short as it was, it still made it's point. How ironic, that this is the idea that inspired the contest in the first place, and I'm going through similar circumstances and it's very hard, but enough rambling from me, that's not what you entered for.
This is a good poem and I enjoy the meaning because it's very close to home. Moving on from "love" or what never was is a hard thing to do. -
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Thanks for your kind words...I went to your page after you commented and if I had went there first I would have known the image wasn't needed but I'm so glad you enjoyed and understood the meaning. It is a very hard thing to deal with all you can do is pick yourself(and the pieces)up and move on! ha!
Thanks again and good luck with your contest
darlintlc
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*sits in awe*
This is so stunning. You made me love rhyme poems again, that takes some very top notch poetic skills.
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This was the greatest comment anyone has ever gave me!! I thank you so much!
darlintlc
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Wow! A great take on the quote. Love the picture too, he looks a bit deceitful doesn't he? Thanks for your entry. Good luck.
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Thanks for the comment on "It's Time To Walk"
Yes the guy in the pic does look deceitful! I thought the quote was perfect for what I had in mind.
Good luck in judging!
darlintlc
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i have it so no pre-writes are allowed , i am not sure how you entered one. it is a great piece but i can not award as it is a pre-write..
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Sorry about that but it did have PW as an opption!!
Glad you enjoyed it though...no worries!!
darlintlc
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Very well written, and nice take on your quote. Enjoyed the read.
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Thanks for your comment on "It's Time To Walk" glad you enjoyed it!!
darlintlc
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Awesome!
I really liked your poem of deception and games a lot, so easy to relate with. Very well written and expressed. "Now's the time to walk, the time has ended for talk" Bravo! Keep the ink flowing and good luck in the contest.
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Thanks for your comment on "It's Time To Walk"
Yes deception and games go hand in hand!!
darlintlc
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i wish that it was that easy to just let go... lol... but its so true... some people are tied to things that just weigh them down... i like it lol....
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Thanks for commenting on "It's Time To Walk"
I wish it was that easy too!!
I've been trying for years!! lol
darlintlc
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uh huh!
i like this very much.
it flows nicely,
you gave it feeling.
vary nice hun.
very good job.
you need to keep writing. i am looking forward to reading more. ^.^
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Thanks for your comment on "It's Time To Walk"
The guy in the pic looked deceitful to me! lol
darlintlc
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