Basking in the sunlight of the day
I remeber those rare old times
Battles won and lost
Heroes and villians of renown
Damseles saved and dragons slain
Courtesey and love abound
A poet's greatest dream was
just to wander free and clear
One thing remains the same
Your friends and family are
not for a time alone
but for all times not here and now
Whether town or country change
or concrete take your town
their loves remains free and clear
as of the poet's greatest dream
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Remeber the old times
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wow wow wow!
i'm blown away! this is stunning, it sends a beautiful message across and is written so well! i love this flow and progression of this poem! keep penning
AWESOME!
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well done I love it! its so beautifully done!
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A clever admixture of the ancient and the modern; this is a thoughtful piece well deserving of praise. Perhaps the whole would be improved by having two verses , breaking at "abound" thus making a more immediate distinction between the two elements.
Some typos amended would certainly improve the English content: remember / villains / damsels / courtesy. Thanks for sharing your mediaeval jaunt. -
hey baby this is really good. is it yours?
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yup all mine
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this reminded me of Poe's poem a dream within a dream.. cuz of the ending ... you used one sentence as a repetitive way in the ending which is very nice indeed... the only thing is that some pieces seem to be misplaced... for you started it like a tale but ended it as aanecdote.... anyways it was great
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