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Transference

He:
Eyes upon thy shadowed beauty call me
tearing the love that embroils my mind.
Passionate feelings that now befall thee;
bow to thy will as my lust is resigned.
Thy beauty commands me submissively
and I’m drawn to your will as if I were blind.
The power that sucks me into thine arms,
consuming my soul with feminine charms.

Her:
I moisten my lips with the tongue of your lust
with only the fluid of life on my mind.
Your pitiful maleness with unbinding trust,
quenching the thirst of my inhuman kind.
Impaling your throat with one viscous thrust,
in my unholy way I have you confined.
I’ve taken the soul from your pitiful shell
you are in the dawn of your newfound hell.

When beauty consumed his soul that was kissed,
his mere mortal heart could never resist...

 

 

 

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With thanks to my AP hubby for letting me consume him.
Art work by: deadger

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  • RedAquarius
    May 19, 2008

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    Ok, how in the heck did I miss this dark beauty??? I love the separation of each into a monologue-esque feel within the poem. Definitely helps create a picture of opposing forces! Great stuff!


  • Immortal Obscurity gold member
    May 18, 2008

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    Wow, this is beautiful. It has a very lyrical, almost-Shakespearean feel to it. Now, I'm not all that big on form, and I'm not familiar with this one, but that was overshadowed by the amazing verbiage throughout. The eloquence of your language was just over the top. Well done, and into the finals for you. Good luck!

    Laura


  • Desire gold member
    May 18, 2008

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    Oh My Word!!

    I Love this one

    When I and inhaled again~ I did not want it to end...
    Beautifully penned and with images to satiate the palate~

    Magnificent form too~

    When beauty consumed his soul that was kissed,
    his mere mortal heart could never resist...
    Keep that quill dancing~ vampiric romancing
    Thank You for sharing Your Talents and Voices~
    Many blessings to You in the contest Sweet Souls
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Faeryn
    May 16, 2008
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    this is amaing! I love it! Your dark writes are the best
    Love,
    Tay

  • Paula Pears
    May 16, 2008

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    This is very dark, I don't know if I like it. I like the sound it makes.
    But I'm not dark


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    May 16, 2008
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    This is good, Sis - but how many times have I told you about mixing "thee" and "you"?

    How long have I known you here? Not very long. In that time I have seen you take great strides in your poetry. Keep it up.


    • Amera gold member
      May 16, 2008
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      Is that better? I only changed him, keeping the voices seperate.

      • Mairi bheag gold member
        May 17, 2008

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        There is still a "your" in line six of the first stanza, but you're getting the hang of it.

        It's still pretty good, and improving all the time.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    May 16, 2008

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    Am I interfering?
    Not quite sure how to comment except maybe "get a room"

    Excellent stuff!


  • PerVirtuous
    May 16, 2008

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    Your ability to think in dark gothic language is impressive and sexy... you wear the tight black clothing so well... your pen writes in such frightening clots of phrasing... mmmm... it is a pleasure to share the terror with you.

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