democracy is much improved
by putting on a mask,
imagination
stirred by fun house mirrors,
reflecting
there is promise in the smallest child
a wooden horse is dressed
to battle dangers undefined
and one may ride
as vested knight
a merry-go-round:
spinning fantasies,
mixing races
dressing generations
in the color pink
A contest entry
- OPTIONS - Come and see!!!! PW ARE ALLOWED - by mystic-angel.
900 points, ended May 19, 2008, 18 entries
Honorable mention
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wow...
great comparisons... wonderfully written and corresponded the backround to the poem, very well written! :-) -
wow
this vested knight can relate to the merry go round ride.(usually quite bumpy)great work!
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Very witty, kept the ridiculous, fun-fare atmosphere going all the way through. Good job
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to the point and striking
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I really like the first line best. Democracy hiding behind a mask. What better way to express the circumstances we find ourselves in politically from Pres. to county sheriff. Nonaccountability. Millions of Billions that are never enough to pay for NEEDS yet fund hysterically hilarious pork barrel salaries or activities. Nonaccountability for illegal activities be it by neglect or by active participation. Election after election with no one worthy to vote for on the ballot. Fun House Mirror distortions of what this country was meant to be. You first lines sums it all up very well. The last as well. For year pink was shunned, by male and female alike for any above the age of choice. It's bright Perkiness ridiculed in an age of gothic black. It does not seem strange at all economically or as a world vision that it is now "the new black", youth see the future as so black it can overcome even that shade of brightness.
I enjoyed your write. High impact, concise. A Strong message for those seeking it, written in soft words and images for those who are not.
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This is great, and after watching the conventions for the last two weeks I feel like I was being force fed cotton candy. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
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whisper
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Well, I just read your comment down below about pink being used for prisons and such. Actually, I live in Davidson County, where the infamous Sheriff Hege painted the prison cells pink and caused quite a rucus.
I see now how it follows the carnivalistic theme and how it could apply to the weakness of our society... still, I like the idea of it making fun of my generation.
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Very cynical and condescending tone you have here, yet not in an obvious way - very subtle.
I think your choice of the color pink is rather intriguing (there goes that interesting comment you so despise
). I'm wondering if that refers to the guys wearing pink (and perhaps the whole idea of a generation of prissy, poster-boy, metrosexuals), or to girls getting more and more... materialistic.
I love the image of the "fun-house mirror" view of democracy - it is somewhat amusing to think of looking at it that way. Distorted, silly... hehe... I feel better already.
Wonderful social commentary - really gets the reader thinking. Of course, you knew that, now didn't you?
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This is an awesome poem. I never would have thought this much meaning would go into cotton candy. It makes one think. Enjoyed the read! Thank you for entering my contest.
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The color pink is sometimes used in prisons and mental hospitals. Yes it is the color of cotton candy. I thought that it goes with my use of the carnival as my metaphor.
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interesting
I actually enjoyed and followed this all the way to the end. But I am curious why you chose the color pink? Was it because of the cotton candy? Sugar coating I guess. Nicely done and GL with the contest. I&V -
love the imagery you use in this - and the sense of hope that remains regardless of the barriers our society may inflict upon our innocence. nice to read something deep for a change.
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