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I want to.

From far away
it is hard to see
the appeal

and I have
never been close

but the appeal
is there
and real

Something says
this is right

but

something else says
this is wrong

what should I do
would I spoil things?
Hurt people?

I cannot say
I must not do

but

I want to,
don't you?

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  • Mairi bheag gold member
    May 17

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    The short lines emphasise the indecision of the speaker. It is as though you are retreating and advancing. Nothing spectacular about the language, but the poem is just right.


  • PerVirtuous Allan gold member
    May 16
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    I am confused. I don't do hints well. You got anything else?

    • Paula Pears
      May 16
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      Who says it was to you?

      • PerVirtuous Allan gold member
        May 16
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        Not me. I told you I don't understand it. What did you think I meant?
        • Paula Pears
          May 17

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          Well if the hint isn't to you, I maybe wouldn't have anything else for you. On the other hand I didn't say it wasn't to you. If I had three hands I could on the one say who says it is a hint?

          Or you could read the poem and decide.
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