From far away
it is hard to see
the appeal
and I have
never been close
but the appeal
is there
and real
Something says
this is right
but
something else says
this is wrong
what should I do
would I spoil things?
Hurt people?
I cannot say
I must not do
but
I want to,
don't you?
A contest entry
- forbidden love by hardwire.
450 points, ended May 17, 2008, 24 entries
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Comments
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The short lines emphasise the indecision of the speaker. It is as though you are retreating and advancing. Nothing spectacular about the language, but the poem is just right.
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I am confused. I don't do hints well. You got anything else?
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Who says it was to you?
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Not me. I told you I don't understand it. What did you think I meant?
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Well if the hint isn't to you, I maybe wouldn't have anything else for you. On the other hand I didn't say it wasn't to you. If I had three hands I could on the one say who says it is a hint?
Or you could read the poem and decide.
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