At the side of hills' slope flooded with aurora,
where under icy peaks, approaching the bouquet,
the fine flower fields from the patron basket,
I look the resistance of branching vine and ivy.
At the bottom of valley in extended hospitality,
in a floral arbour of pretty spread ardent colors,
include a streaming aqua blessing the natural feast,
across the threshold demanding revealing breaths.
In outlining tranquility swimming in calm contour,
a reality in landscape mixing benevolence of soul,
with accompanied providence of spacing romance;
in response of an echo speaking to reflect moments.
The earth, sky, water play music in rhythms of chorus
in groves,on wedding of horizon in smells of rosemary,
surprises around in such a paradise making me crazy;
in melodious chanting of atmosphere through a purity.
Author notes
Picture Prompt
A contest entry
- Another Picture Inspirational by Kelli Marie.
3000 points, ended May 29, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I personally loved this sonnet. I found your imagery beautiful. I read it out loud to another person and they got a different meaning from your poem
more of a sensual feeling of early morning lovers ... that to me is what makes this beautiful two readers...took away from it beautiful poetry thank you for sharing...blessings always~ Trisha~ 
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Most of this comes through well SA and very poetically indeed
amazing work on the imagery to give us your visions of all this nature
I can somewhat see where Kelle is coming from as a lot surpassed me on the first read..yet on the second came through a lot easier...I think that lies in your style...but also the intensity in the wording within this one, which lends to the form too..which understanding the style of sonnet meant reading so many words was actually so easy. This has quite a tight rhythm to it as it should being a sonnet
This is by far one of my favourites of yours recently...stand out write
Cindy
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I think this is a bit verbose. I read this at least six times and couldn't grasp it. I don't mean to be offensive, and maybe it is me. I will read again for sure. Thank you for sharing in the contest.
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Its written in sonnet style and describe my imaginations of nature's charms. I don't find anything hard, which is verbose. I recommend , you, to please show this piece to poets like Penman, Aliceinpoetryland, Mysticstorm or like these and they will tell you its flowing beauty.
I think, if you don't understand it, please don't give any award to this poem. I will IM to these poets for helping you to understand.
Feel very regret.
Anyway, Thanks for six times reading.
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Like I left word to you, I reread it. And it all fell in place. It was me. This morning, it just all seem scrambled. My mind was not yet ready for the provoking read. You are correct, it is not in anyway verbose. It is very well written. I should have waited to reread before commenting, and have learned a lesson on this one. Please forgive me. This is a great piece of poetry...sonnet.
Kelli
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