In the name of the father,
The son,
And the Holy Spirit,
Never were we born,
Never were we spawned,
From the womb we're torn,
And taken to beyond,
Given are we to the wolves,
Laid on the altar,
Embrace God as he pulls,
And rescues us, Our Father,
Amen.
A contest entry
- #75 Short Prayers by daviscth.
300 points, ended May 28, 2008, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Altar by Polaja.
850 points, ended June 3, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
This one's for God - Peace Out Homie! - Domz & Lisa
Comments
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well written but doesnt quite appeal to me.. little too religious.. but thats just me. otherwise really well done. i can appreciate a good write when i see one. so thanks for the entry and good luck
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I got you...
yeah i understand that many people aren't religious, and i do respect that but i am religious, not that im saying there have to be barriers in a relationship because of it y'know?
like we can still be friendly and talk and stuff but we don't HAVE to talk about religious stuff, my religion isn't bible bashing or going to chappel to be forgiven, mine is a more personal affair and it will remain that way...lol, i haven't got a problem with someone who has different beliefs than i, so i really get your comment and thanks - Domz
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This is a great short poem... I like the traditional setting that you have used the prompt, and the touch of rhyme gives it a good rhythm... thank you for entering this contest
Keep writing
Polly
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Thank you for posting this in my contest. It's very thought provoking.
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this is really thoughtful. i think it has something about being saved by baptisum in the church.
i am not cathlic but if you think babys are born with sin, then have them do it.lol
am i even close?
good write either way.
KNIGHT TIME
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yes you are close
you got it, and thanks for leaving this,
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if i was right then it has changed to a great write.
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