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Haiku - Candyfloss

religion called cotton candy (365/37)
 

candyfloss [s]pun round
Life's spri[n]g stick, sticky lips lick,
shun s[l]ickness unsound

Author notes

Words in [b]rackets have two or more meanings
s[l]ickness [s]pun sun spun pun

Background Cleis
http://flickr.com/photos/77327379@N00/143589592/


Pic : religion called cotton candy Jenni
http://flickr.com/photos/jennipenni/2458013876/

Stick in the mud Albert Mock
http://flickr.com/photos/kafkan/2153386994/

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Comments

  • jadeangyal
    August 25
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    slickness/sickness...nice! I also like the tongue twister. Cotton candy deserves a poem. It is in a class by itself, to be sure, as is your haiku.

  • Piccola gold member
    August 14

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    this is different than most haiku that I've read or indeed written. I keep reading it trying to find hidden meaning. I am also looking for the set up and the aha! or surprise ending ... nice presentation.

  • Samplette gold member
    May 16

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    You are getting me with your tongue twister type haiku. Very unique. An interesting new way to take the form. I will ponder it a bit. Thank you for entering.
    Sam

  • D Saul So Sexy
    May 16

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    i never read anything like this i think you did a great excellent job here and good luck to you in the contest