Like a snake charmer she enticed him closer
his body muscular, lithe, flowed like water
Rippling with desire her body yearning
needing to feel the heat of his fire, burning
Coiling himself around her, probing her swollen sex
he brandished his intent over her, nibbling her neck
Then without warning, with precision he struck
injecting his venom; into her bloodstream it rushed
Their love had been heated he couldn't let her go
his poison in her he was going to kill her slow
Pumping more of his fiery poison in
he watched as her life began to wane, dim
Her body convulsed as her claret rapidly flowed
taking her one last time his body arched and bowed
Becoming a tourniquet around her her breath; a sigh
hissing, he drank hungrily from her dark crimson wine
Happy she would never feel the touch of another
he held her tighter and began to slowly smother
Feeling her slip into deaths eternal bliss
he sealed her fate with a final killer kiss.
Author notes
~*~Snake Bite~*~
A contest entry
- Snake Bite/ Quickie/Image Prompt by imahealer.
1700 points, ended May 30, 2008, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Picture Inspired Dark Love [adult] by ennovy.
700 points, ended June 11, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - DARK EROTICA.........CHECK IT OUT.............ADULT by WillAlwaysLove.
1200 points, ended December 22, 2008, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Embracing the Night by Night Terrors.
400 points, ended August 4, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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talk about killer love great poem thanks for entering
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Love it...
Dark, sensual & atmospheric...
Compelling narrative with passion & fire that enthralled throughout...
Good luck & keep up the good work...
Well done!!!
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Thank you very much for your wicked comment
valued and appreciated
~sugar~
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LOVED IT! Wonderful flow. Your words jump out of the page, amazing. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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Thank you for the silver, glad you enjoyed
~sugar~
Merry Christmas
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love the last two lines... reminds me of something... don't know what. anyway, well written. rhyming not forced here, so that made it flow better. well done poet.
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Appreciate you reading and commenting
glad you enjoyed
~sugar~
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'Feeling her slip into deaths eternal bliss
he sealed her fate with a final killer kiss.'
Such a great poem.
Thank you so much for entering, i realy enjoyed reading this. Best of luck.
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Ah, the kiss of the serpent, isn't that where all this began, waaaaaayyyyyyyyy long ago? Very nice tale, and very well done, loved the balance of it. Thanks for entering, and good luck in the contest.
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This a very vivid picture you paint. Such a wicked Vampire/Viper like male......Thank you for entering...Novy
& Brazos
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Always a pleasure to have you read
Valued and appreciated
~sugar~
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WHAT A WAY TO GO!
Damn, if we ever get together I am going to have to watch me neck from your killer grip and from your vampire kiss to boot! HE! HE! Still, I could be fun living forever as your slave with you as my eternal Mistress, Sugar!
Congrats on the trophy. I like the ending best which tied this entire piece together.
Feeling her slip into deaths eternal bliss
he sealed her fate with a final killer kiss.
Peace & Love!
Earl.
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What a way to go indeed.
What fun it would be. He! He! I would get so much pleasure biting your neck LOL!!!
Thanks for reading sweetie
Always a pleasure
Love you ~sugar~ xxx
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This verse is dark, sensual, and took me to a very uncomfortable place of being smothered. I have had a man try to strangle me, and your words evoked that almost deadly memory. Your couplets are well done, and rhyme is unforced. Very subtle. I do not know who has written this, but after I finish judging I must add you to my fav's if you are not already there. Thank yo for entering this contest!
Best wishes.
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I have only just started to rhyme...thank for your lovely comment...
Thank you for the bronze
~sugar~
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how on earth did i miss this lol i think you did a very great job with this miss sugar tang i like this hon its so sexy
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Thank you sweetie
Where you hiding???
Always a pleasure to read your comments.
~sugar~
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It's a winner!
This is one of your best pieces. Well written and I like the backgroung and font color. Attractive, all around!
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Thank you sweetie
I was feeling inspired. Always a pleasure to have you read.
Luv ~sweetness~ xx
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Damn good!
At least she died a very happy woman. One of your best poems yet, sis.
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Cheers bro.
Always a pleasure, glad you enjoyed.
~sugar~
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Brilliant piece hun. I love it. This is captivating in the extreme. Really good imagery here that stands out and hits the reader between the eyes. Well done indeed honey. Fantastic writing.
Love
Wayne Leon
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What can I say...I have my moments...this being one of them.
I had got it on my mind all last night.
Thank you for reading sweetie.
Always a pleasure.
Love ~sugar~xx
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AWESOME !
This is truly captivating, what an image of words
Each stanza woes you til the final killer kiss
Love it
Julie
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Thank you Julie, glad you enjoyed.
I have had that slithering about my head all last night and most of this morning
It's good to get it out.
~sugar~
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Wow your right that is one hell of a kiss thanks for sharing it was really dark filled with lots of imagary too great write
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Told you wicked kiss...
Cheers MJ
Love Shell xx
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