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Paid In Coins Of Dripping Blood


Chains
          hanging

Knives
          longing

Cuts
          Bleeding

Together we are complete

          achieving true happiness

Author notes

The prompt for this short (12-17 word) quickie piece was:

“Happiness: We rarely feel it.
I would buy it, beg it, steal it,
Pay in coins of dripping blood
For this one transcendent good”
~Amy Lowell


I made it 13 words and based it around what I and My pet have together ...

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  • HeavenScent4U
    May 16, 2008
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    wow, this had gold written all over it. mine is so undeserving compared to this, i would give you my trophy if i could although i know that's not why you wrote it. i always see so much love and devotion in yours and chantell's poetry to or for each other


  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
    May 16, 2008
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    Wow a great take


    Cindy


  • Angelflower
    May 16, 2008

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    wow! this is really different but I like it..
    And I like knives too hehe.. got a whole collection my family thinks I'm weird but I like them!! I love the fact that you somehow Incorporated them in this!!! And you created a very vivid and truthful image here which I really like. best of luck..

    Angel


  • Unsigned gold member
    May 16, 2008

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    okies....good write. I am so jealous of people that can speak the truth about everything and accept themselves completely...good for you two!

    Simon

  • HeavenScent4U
    May 16, 2008

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    I can so appreciate this coming from you. Shows a TRUE sense of happiness that not a lot of people know wonderfully done, looks gold to me best of luck although I doubt you'll need it with this be well and be blessed

    p.s. I love you


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    May 16, 2008
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    Ohh a bit BDSM... fantastic take on the prompt!


  • Tattboyspet
    May 16, 2008
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    i love You ... there is not much more that i can say other than that ~shaking head~
    You and i give me a heartbeat


    • Tattboy silver member
      May 16, 2008
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      Tp..........da
      T...........Dum

      Tp..........da
      T...........Dum

      Tp..........da
      T...........Dum


      • Tattboyspet
        May 16, 2008
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        lol ... almost like a dance step


        • Tattboy silver member
          May 16, 2008
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          It is; which is why I may miss the beat a bit when I dance, I am listening to what you do to My heartbeat.


          • Tattboyspet
            May 16, 2008
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            now THAT i don't believe!
            the tongue that sticks out???
            hehehehehehehe


            • Tattboy silver member
              May 16, 2008

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              I won't bother with the sweet-talking then ...

              *grrr*

              (I thought you LIKED My tongue sticking out!)

              • Tattboyspet
                May 16, 2008

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                You NEVER have to sweet talk me ... it's a given, all You have to do is say "sit, open" and it shall be done!

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