as time twirled by
in our made-up world
and colours
jumbled up
into rainbows
crystalline dreams
turned into
sparkling stars
and flyaway wishes
upon each ballon
floated our fantasy
carried away
by butterflies
as if to the heavens
Author notes
option 2~ passionate nothings
A contest entry
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425 points, ended June 1, 2008, 16 entries
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Comments
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nicely passionate . . liked "crystalline dreams" and "floated our fantasy" . . well done
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Hmm.. this isn't the best poem I've seen, but it certainly isn't the worst.
I have to say, it's a little, not so much choppy but.. simplictic. Maybe that's just me. Still, a good effort.
Good luck!
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