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When Truth Sinks In

Quintessence now resides
in the darker part of light

feeling supplant
isn't where I wanted to be

 

(neither then or now)

 

In too deep to not breathe;

choking on reality.

 

 

Solemn oaths slowly suppressed

into silent murmurs


and redemption no longer comes
like the song of the bluebird at dawn.

 

(swallowing comes as hard as breathing)

 

What it is just IS

and doesn't matter anymore 

 

 

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  • Beautiful-N-Broken gold member
    February 24

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    Oh wow! great write!!!! Fits the title so well. Couldn't follow the link but I am sure it fit the picture as well.


  • delightfulmess silver member
    June 9, 2008

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    Excellent emotional imagery.
    this is very moving. well done sweetie.



    Delila


  • leo2
    May 21, 2008

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    Though the language is somewhat 'highbrow' the emotions expressed are as 'down to earth' as they can be. At times I've been to the brink of the same abyss of despair. The poem is sad but the presentation is excellent.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long


  • faderman1959
    May 16, 2008

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    This speaks of acceptance! Of pain, lessons learned and of ones self and who we are. A very thought provoking poem my friend! It is rife with emotion!


  • Lexie
    May 16, 2008

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    I like the ending "What it is just IS" because that is reality. I also like how you would do things like, (swallowing comes as hard as breathing). It adds interest. Very good.


  • Tattboyspet
    May 16, 2008

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    'Solemn oaths slowly suppressed
    into silent murmurs' ~sigh~

    Sometimes it's difficult to accept that what you want is not what another wants and your last two lines summed that thought up ... to protect yourself from hurt sometimes means that you are protecting yourself from teachings and one can NEVER learn enough my friend

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