the full moon on the river
gazed blankly at us,
in medias res of
the fight in the carpark.
music rattles the windows
of the car I bought you
as we screamed at one another
of scientific failures
and emotional feats.
car doors slam,
and we walk arm in arm
through the door,
comfortably unhappy,
as if we were to enter
the mist of dreams.
do si do in ballet slippers,
smile back at the happy faces
in this total chaos
draped with tattered decorations.
this was the last dance.
Author notes
The list I used:
the fight in the carpark
-pania
full moon on the river
-pania
mist of dreams
-azure85
comfortably unhappy
-trista
scientific failures
-trista
do si do
-judyjudyjudy
ballet slippers
-judyjudyjudy
music rattles the windows
-pania
in medias res
-Aerden
happy faces
-pania
total chaos
-pania
the last dance
-pania
tattered decorations
-pania
The list I made:
raining memories (claimed by azure85)
bitter kisses (claimed by Pamela A Lamppa)
faithless believer (claimed by trista)
hold me close (claimed by pania)
defenseless protector (claimed by ea)
seventy-seven heavens (claimed by trista)
kings and queens (claimed by Aerden)
plastic engagement rings (claimed by Pamela A Lamppa)
fallen eyelashes (claimed by judyjudyjudy)
unwanted wishes (claimed by pania)
goodnight kisses (claimed by judyjudyjudy)
alone in the office (claimed by judyjudyjudy)
flirting through text
thief's embrace (claimed by pania)
the final scene of this love team
midnight blue dawn
golden evening
stale cigarettes (claimed by judyjudyjudy)
still reeking of last year's regret (claimed by Pamela A Lamppa)
bits of you and me glued together
torn between sense and sensibility
the stranger asking for my number (claimed by judyjudyjudy)
A contest entry
- Victorian Parlor Game # 15 - The Mixer by ea.
450 points, ended May 25, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Mixer - Part II by ea.
450 points, ended May 23, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Dance with me?
Comments
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A sad picture, so well painted. This was the last dance. Thank you for the dance.
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Excellent use of the your phrases, you constructed atory in itself in your poem! The car door slamming, wowzers, leading into the last dance.
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lol, I was thinking you needed the car doors slam that I claimed for this as I as reading, and I see you did take it, which is great! I learned a couple new things from this, in media res being one. It takes two to tango and you proved that here... well done on this emotionally evocative piece. Thank you!
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alone in the office - May I have this dance?
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May I have this dance? - the stranger asking for my number
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May I have this dance? still reeking of last year's regret
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stale cigarettes - May I have this dance
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May I have this dance? - thief's embrace
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May I have this dance - goodnight kisses
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defenseless protector - may I have this dance?
Here's the tune we're dancing to: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zcyAwI95iiQ -
May I have this dance? Kings and queens
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May I have this dance? - fallen eyelashes
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May I have this dance? plastic engagement rings
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May I have this dance? seventy-seven heavens
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May I have this dance? - unwanted wishes
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Raining memories-May I have this dance?
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May I have this dance? Faithless believer
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May I have this dance? Hold me close
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May I have this dance? = "bitter kisses"
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