We curtsy as the music starts
and hope, springing forth on Cuban heels
that hit the floor like beating drums,
sends scents of coconut oil and summer sun
through the wind chimes of my heart.
This song has no beginning, no end,
just hold me close in thief’s embrace;
we can cheat on place and time
in a swirl of rainbow’s fabric torn,
gather wild raspberries under moonshine.
I’ll sup them from your candied lips
and allow unwanted wishes life
until you tire, desire dwindling,
my ruby slippers shattering,
no more to dance for love.
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Author notes
no beginning, no end
hold me close
curtsy
drums
wild raspberries
springing
unwanted wishes
coconut oil and summer sun
swirl of rainbow's fabric
candied lips
Cuban heels
wind chimes
ruby slippers
dwindling
thief's embrace
moonshine
shattering
My Original Lists:
fiddles (claimed)
long skirts with broderie anglais underslips (claimed)
the supper room
the fight in the carpark (claimed)
full moon on the river (claimed)
Added : Day 1 - stars reeling through the sky (claimed)
red brake lights shining
bursts of laughter gusting
children sleeping in chairs (claimed)
piano tinkling (claimed)
Day 2 - honeyed light pours through the doors (claimed)
car doors slam (claimed)
headlights like spotlights
stray dogs sniffing (claimed)
gum tree woodfire perfume
Day 3 - the supper bell rings (claimed)
the floor is shaking
music rattles the windows (claimed)
tea and cream cakes (claimed)
long hair tossing like a wave (claimed)
Day 4 - dress boots shining (claimed)
happy faces (claimed)
total chaos (claimed)
music weaves it all together (claimed)
drinking whisky in the carpark (claimed)
Day 5 - the last dance (claimed)
tattered decorations (claimed)
footprints in the dust (claimed)
baby crying (claimed)
spilt tea
A contest entry
- Victorian Parlor Game # 15 - The Mixer by ea.
450 points, ended May 25, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Mixer - Part II by ea.
450 points, ended May 23, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Cool. Been dancin!
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Congrats on your goldS !!!
I couldn't for the life of me figure out how you'd work all those words/phrases into a poem, but you make it look EASY! (And I didn't find it easy at all. 
) Great job, and I thank you for the "dances" exchanged!
Best wishes,
~J.
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This is such an excellent poem on dance, you used each and every selection so clever. It flowed with each movement across the dance floor of your poem!
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Thank you, it was fun, and having good partners helped!
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Excellent. Congratulations on the gold. This is quite remarkable. Well done. ~Pamela
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Thank you, Pamela.
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even without your fifth day, (I think your NZ timing gave you an extra) you have 19 claims on your dance card which puts you into the finalist list for The Mixer -Part II, as well.
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excellent! I like how tight this is. I thought strip the willow was a country dance movement like bird in a cage - now I shall have to look it up because I get this Latin feeling from the poem and think the title is much sexier than the dance move it evoked in my mind originally.
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I don't know Bird in a Cage, but Strip the Willow involves being involved with one partner after another - some you fall in love with instantly, and live through a whole affair in the sixteen bars or so that you're together - others, you don't.
If you're lucky, and the band keeps playing, and the circle is small, you even get to do it again with him! -
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aha... my dance terms are rusty but that rings a bell with me now.
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May I have this dance? - footprints in the dust
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Yes!
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baby crying - may I have this dance?
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Yes!
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May I have this dance?
the last dance
tattered decorations -
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yes!
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May I have this dance? Drinking whiskey in the car park
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Yes!
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dress boots shining - May I have this dance?
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Yes!
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May I have this dance?
happy faces
total chaos -
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Yes!
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May I have this dance?
Music weaves it all together
Long hair tossing like a wave -
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Yes!
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May I have this dance? Children sleeping in chairs.
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Yes!
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May I have this dance? tea and cream cakes
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Yes!
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may I have this dance - the supper bell rings?
Here's the tune we're dancing to: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zcyAwI95iiQ -
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Phew...I'm still dancing - yes, let's have this dance.
Here's the scene I've been describing, in my entry...
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jRh21ao8lzQ
an annual festival, where I used to live -
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lovely! I know it well - I attended contra dances all throughout my twenties.
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May I have this dance?
music rattles the windows -
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Yes!
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May I have this dance? honeyed light pours through the doors
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Yes!
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May I have this dance? Stars reeling through the sky, piano tinkling
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yes!
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long skirts with broderie anglais underskirts - may I have this dance?
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yes!
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May I please have this dance? stray dogs sniffing
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yes!
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car doors slam - may I have this dance?
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with pleasure
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May I have this dance? - "fiddles"
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Oh yes.
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May I have this dance?
the fight in the carpark
full moon on the river -
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Definitely. They're yours.
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