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Prowler

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Constrictor prowls slithering across the boundaries .

With its skin smooth and silky  and twenty foot  tall.

 it began  to twist and twirl  to hunt for his food.

Creeping around  in the dark with  a evil look in its eye .
 Crawling in and out of  corners through the depths

of the night.

Suddenly the door opened with a jerk of a hand.

 The snake took a stance with a hiss and a swipe 

as it  jumped up to have a  malicious bite.

 With this it  devoured a deep  infliction of pain. 

 Which drove the inflicted to scream and complain.

 

 

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  • Great imagery within this competition--Very well written !!!

  • imahealer gold member
    May 22

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    You described this attack very graphically. Your rhyme was perfect. The only suggestion I might make is to put the sentences together with the proper punctuation. I will be back to review your editing. I really liked your theme. What really scared me was your very last sentence. Where is the snake? GAve me chills! Thank you so much for your entry and very best wishes.

    Shana
  • Very different. You have definitely captured the unsuspected attack of a snake. Good luck.

  • Hetha gold member
    May 20

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    Yowch! That does look like a nasty snake bite! You did a fine job on your piece, so good luck with the contest.

  • Piccola gold member
    May 20

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    what a terrible encounter! We have lots of snakes here and with the heat coming on they get cranky and don't want to be disturbed. Same with the scorpions... nice write.

    Constrictor prowls slithering
    across the boundaries .

    With skin smooth and silky

    twisting and twirling

    hunting for food.

    These words paint a good picture. Thanks for sharing with the library.
  • LOL captured the scene perfectly
    Little sod, or not so little all 5ft foot of him
    He ate his proper dinner the following day
    Guess I was tasty hehe
    Good luck and thanks hun I am nearly fully recovered xx

  • Wow---Very intense!!
    --Well done and Best of luck in the contest!

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