To die a slow death...
Love betrayed
Lie's repeated
Arm's empty
Night's alone
Prince's unthroned
Dream's unrealized
Heart's broked
Promise's unkept
Author notes
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A contest entry
- cry me a river by patsoldcat.
600 points, ended May 20, 2008, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pain..... by takenfromgrace.
600 points, ended August 26, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Love it. It's a great short poem.
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Thanks so much. I was in a very bad place when I wrote this.
Good luck with your contest!!
darlintlc
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Fabulous write on this. Love the poem.
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Thanks for the comment on "Slow Death" it's much appreciated!!
darlintlc
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Been through this! I can definitely relate! Hits fast and hard and that makes this even better! Well done!
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It happens to most of us from time to time...we just have to wait it out.
Thanks
darlintlc
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final edit
short but good,
liked the meter chopping emotions to snap shots.
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Such sadness running through this piece. I like the way that the piece is not broken up into stanzas. This gives it the feeling of not being able to catch your breath, falling, deeper into desolation and despair. Keep writing. You are very good.
Dark Love
Wayne Leon
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Thanks for the comment on "Slow Death" yes I was in a very lonely place when I wrote this as you can tell. You have a great understanding of this kind of poetry!
I thank you
darlintlc
xxxooo
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thanks
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