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Desperado

My life is lonely of late
I lost the one I love
And I cannot seem to get over him
Even though I have all these wonderful friends
I just can't seem to let him go

My heart is heavy as well
Because even with all the love I have within
The one I love has rejected it
My heart is heavy with pain
And a need for him to love me back

My mind is desperate
So desperate to move on
And look back one day with a smile
I desire to be happy again
But I wonder how long it will take
Before the sun shines on me

My body is really weak
The thought of his touch or kiss
Just awakens all my nerves
And I get a moment of bliss
That often ends in tears

I will not be a slave to my body
I will listen to my mind
And teach my heart to let go
Hopefully, it will end with a smile
Rather than a tear

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  • KadafiethaInfamous
    September 12

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    Very Well Written

    You have a way with words and I like you style. I want to see more just like this one. You should be published because your words are very intriguing. Keep writing and I'll keep reading. I really like this poem.


  • dragongirl0006
    May 16

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    Beatifull

    I love the way you wrote this poem ,it has a nice tone, and you're not afraid to use your feelings.I'd really like to follow your work!

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  • frownsnfreckles
    May 16

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    hopefully it will
    A nice reflective piece, I like the tone and the way you deal with the emotions without indulging too much in the melancholy moments.

    My mind is desperate
    So desperate to move on
    And look back one day with a smile
    I desire to be happy again
    But I wonder how long it will take
    Before the sun shines on me

    there is an understanding of and acceptance of the truth which allows for the letting go.

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  • Woodchuck4400 silver member
    May 16

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    The end of a relationship is so hard. Often it is bruising to the soul and made more so by the desperate need for the familiar and the shock of loss and lonliness. Great job.

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  • Lady Creme
    May 16

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    I know the pain you're going through, which you show to us quite well in this poem.
    It will be better one day, just have to take it one step at a time. Brava.
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