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Cyclone

cyclone roars through town
all living gasp and swallow
one bird sings a song

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  • Kelli Marie
    May 19, 2008

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    There is a stange stillness about this one, like I am there with the lone bird. Great job. Good luck to you.
    Kelli


  • individuality gold member
    May 16, 2008
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  • individuality gold member
    May 16, 2008

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    a good piece, i like the double meaning here that could be applied with swallows and then the bird singing a song aftr the rush.


  • Samplette gold member
    May 16, 2008

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    Yeah..I can see and hear this very well. A good write, and it is not a subject that I have read a lot about. Very well crafted. Thank you for entering the contest.
    Sam