Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

I Can Face The Day In Haze

Needles linger long after
the medicated high

pills rattle promises in bottles
of forged reality

they say they're child proof

A contest entry

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments


  • D Saul So Sexy
    May 16, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    wow this was deep and these bottle of pills made this eve more deeper for me i am so so liking this you congradulations on your cup nice job


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    May 16, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    Oh I wasn't expecting that last line!!
    Love this.. thanks!


  • Solo Wisp gold member
    May 16, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    Like the depth in this poem ..

    pills rattle promises in bottles ... ahh yes.

    Great working here ...

    Steve


  • perfectsunset gold member
    May 16, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    Woww this was so clever! Loved the idea of "pills rattle promises in bottles of forged reality"

    Really descriptive & original... & loved the ending hehe with "they say they're childproof" gotta love that line!!

    Amazing work!