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Rescind my soul, these bones
and flesh of dust,
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reduce to ash old scars
of pain, all thoughts ~
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and sculpt a cold,
unfeeling block of stone
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of marble head and heart
to call my own.
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unfeeling block of stone
Author notes
Sappho, Marble Statue, 1852, James Pradier (1790-1852)
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wow, what an image, this is good and it says a lot without having to have a lot of detail, I love how words have that ability and how people can be so good at making just a few words say a whole lot. This is really good.
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I'm glad you were able to stop in to check out my poetry, and thanks also for the kudos!! 
<(I love that little bird) Anyway, you really made my day!! 
And I look forward to checking out your own poetry pages here on AP. Take care...
Peace,
Cyn
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First it is beautiful, sad but beautiful. A lovely way of expressing a hurt that seems so deep it can not be over-come...that all the speaker can imagine is an unfeeling life replacing what once felt a great hurt.
Not a bad idea as long as we can rescind it when we feel the need to feel again. Ah, if only it were that easy.
Beautifully expressed.
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xx Cyn xx
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Clear and concise. I dig it.
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if it were but that easy. instead we have the beating flesh that aches each time tock ticks and feel the pain from others who are the statues made of stone. wonderfully penned
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Such wonderful imagery in this, such pain.
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Loved the tone of this, kinda ye olde English if ya na what I mean, great intro, I like it, well done indeed.
Floorboards.
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This is wonderful. I can't even seem to put into words the depth of meaning it has or chords that is has struck with me. Thank you!
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This is a gem. You really write well in your minimalist mode.
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This one is a gem. I'm reminded of the famous "Self Made Man" sculpture. This is a similar perspective from the feminine point of view. Well done.
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Beauty in brevity! You left me with so many different views and feelings to your words...truly a grift and so well done...you have a wonderful style which is easy to understand yet makes the reader think...excellent write...
Love,
mystic
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Omg Cyn,
you are wasted on this site, get that book written NOW!
these words are so powerful this has to be a winner.
Slan
dolores xx
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Brilliant!!!
Bravo!!! Outstanding!!! Encore!!!
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Another thought provoking poem
Once again you have produced a poem with many possible interpretations. The first line could be interpreted as a heartfelt plea to the soul, which would further be interpreted as the controlling element in one's being. The impression is then given of life as a burden, with the hope this sought for "recreation" will prove to be positive and enduring. This of course would have to be an out of this world experience wouldn't it? Thank you for sharing these thoughts. I would be interested in your thoughts as you put these lines together.
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this a very nice and moving piece...i am getting the sense that the subject is desiring to build herself out of something more solid than her mere flesh & bone, thus being less penetrable. a heart of marble is not so easily broken, unlike one of flesh.
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lol at poet - this sounds like you want be a statue
okay i will get my hiosel and chip away at thought. why have it marble when life can be free flowing? whether in the madness of darkess or the greatness of light a good poem.
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Speaking of a new beginning without pain. Pain has brought many truths to my life. But it robs us of or innocence so quickly. Our innocence is a tresure. I sure you can relate. You have a beautiful family.
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How did i miss this golden gem?
Reborn!
In fresh form
so you may claim it yours,
this time around.
A stunning show of words and continuous meaning.
You bring refinement, wonder and magic in this exquisite piece,
reaching higher levels and astonishing poise with every well positioned word.
Needless to say,
This is great,
this is art.
Blessings always lassie,
LOWELL
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Thank you, Kind Sir...
and now my head is swelling!
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Beautifully Written...
This is one of your all-time best yet!!!
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oh my i am typing with one hand my greasing my truck but this is stunning i love the pace of this.
so few words so much and so beautiful
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Simply, beautiful.
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From ashes to marble...sculpt me once again! Bring forth my life, so that all can see. Different interpretation of your poem! I love it though...~Sie
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I like this. It reminds us of the woman who once lived but also it expresses the qualities that make us human and what is left once we remove them. The style is very minimalist which gives it a lot of impact, drawing on the essentials.
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Rose of Ireland
This is very nice Dear. I kinda saw the statue this is about but your poem page slowed my computer down for some reason. Think it was the background lol. Had to turn my computer off. Any way if this is in a contest Good luck with it had to go to quick favorites to comment lol.
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