Vivid organic eruption
in the glimmering sun,
singing to the morning air
harmoniously.
Rhythmic drams of dew
dance and sway
in celestial accordance.
Heaven's palette begets
a concert of color.
A contest entry
- Bear's PIF by Arkbear.
400 points, ended May 17, 2008, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I love the last line "concert of color". Wonderful imagery in this piece!
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bravo
A very, very lovely piece of poetry on nature, deserving of the gold! bravo... bravo... bravo... -
A good take on the prompt in which you link-in many musical terms in a gently successful way. A demanding concept in brevity that you have carried through with aplomb. A thought, as "accordance" is merely an agreement, perhaps "concordance" a harmonious state of things, would have been a sounder choice? But, regardless of that, many plaudits on your gold award. Well merited.
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Thank you very much for your comment. I wanted to use accordance, just a simple agreement. It worked for me, with what I was trying to convey. Again thank yoru for taking time to read and comment.
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Gosh!
I have no idea how I am going to place all of these entries.....as each one gets better and better!
This is sooo lovely, and you should be proud of these 30 words ~
You chose some extra special words to build this piece of Art, and that is what really captures my soul,
....grrreat job!
Good luck and God bless,
Bear ~
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THANK YOU!!
You are always so kind when commenting and judging. I'm glad I could affect you in some way with my poetry. Thanks again for Gold.
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Nicely penned!
Best wishes in the contest!
Write on!
*PEACE*
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