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Seasons Beginning

Gutters violently shatter nature's rain
condensing its matter into a stream;
drooling from the mouth
attempting to break free.

Ripening the soil and seed
evaporating its moist air
tickleing the sky
and raping them of their last tear.

Kissing them softly
pollinating within.

Sniffing their waft
senseing seasons beginning.

Blooming the fetus
flowering in the womb;
thankful for this cry
that allowed the sun to peek through.

Author notes

it's about spring beginning.

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  • LittleAnn
    June 4, 2008
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    Love the imagery produced by the metaphors and personifications - such a great poem about spring.
    Just like the other commenters, I particularly like the line
    "and raping them of their last tear."

    Thank you so much for entering my contest!
    Keep on writing!
    Annie


  • DogTagz-TheJalapeno
    May 19, 2008
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    Good luck on the contest!


  • DogTagz-TheJalapeno
    May 19, 2008
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    Awww. That one was awesome! It was really discriptive! I loved it!

  • imoutyo
    May 18, 2008

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    beautiful vivid and evocative. a fine and interesting write. "raping them of their last tear" was a line that was unexpected but imaginative and somehow, captured some of the viciousness that exists beneath the surface of some of nature


  • WatchingStars
    May 18, 2008

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    not exactly completely random, but an excellent poem. the line "and raping them of their last tear" is certainly random. good luck!

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