Wonderful bliss accompanies the beautiful embrace of harmony
While my heart thumps wildly in my chest, beating to the rhythm of my soul;
My delicate spirit flying freely in the wind, simultaneously pulsing with the speed of time;
A soft whisper of declaration clarifies the heat and the passion of the moment;
Entwined into one being, whole and unique in the heart of the ghostly past;
Giggling quietly, grass stains accompanying the tune of undeniable love;
Last chance to shine, the moment of the burning sun creating waves of vivacious kisses
Nothing like the wonderful feeling of shared love.
A contest entry
- Free Rein - with Hints... by RedAquarius.
425 points, ended May 29, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I'm guessing this is the grass stains & giggles (and or quiet delight) prompt but it's not noted so I may be incorrect. It has a very soft feel to it, though I feel it could be strengthened but removing some excess words. That's personal opinion however
. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.
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This is a beautiful poem I really like the soft honesty and love behind your words, which were well chosen and wonderfully crafted... good luck in the contest
Keep writing
Polly
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From the contest rules: Please note your option choice in Author's notes. Thanks - will be back at end to review.
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I thought this rocked our worlds!
Loved it, loved it , loved it...we all felt that we
walked away grass stained and smiling ear to ear!
wonderfully written and smartly done...prose and freewrite
combined, lovely to enjoy!
ears/Seattle GREAT POEM!
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this was a very interesting peace good luck to you in this contest i think you did a very great excellent job with this
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