off tonight,
.
remove this earthly view
from my sight,
.
this life of pleasure
has been lived in vain,
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invoke a world of silence,
let it reign,
.
darken all starry objects
in the sky,
.
renounce this mortal heart,
and let my spirit die.
.
Turn the lamp of knowledge
Author notes
The painting is the poetess "Sappho" - the artist is unknown.
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Wise-Wonderful...
I like the way it works in my mind... "Destruction" strikes from ontologic to hierologic, spiritual and psychoanalitical thoughts. A majestic composition. The closing line made a reverse meaning to me. It came out, ~ the last ~ as to "live". A profound poem.
In respect,
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU
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Hummz, you write beautiful, even remarkable
Wow!
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the poet of hearts and beautiful words
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What a metaphor!!
The use of lingo here is beyond anything on the site. i love the sadness of it how it was expressed was just excellent. the picture the font all help too.
Slán
Dolores x
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Amazing!!!
WOW, what a chilling look at a soul's despair. You always pull it off, with this creative, quite brilliant use of metaphor, Poetess!!! Better than Sappho herself could have done.
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very good
i wish it could be acommplished
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Thank you,
I appreciate your taking the time to read my work today. And thank you for adding me as a fav, I'll be sure to drop in for a visit to your pages ASAP. Thanks again. Peace, Cyn 
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Bravo
How well you have captured the spirit and essence of the pic, everything is perfect here from the background to the font to the words used to weave such a tapestry of sadness. A lovely medieval theme presented excellently! Loved it
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Thank you,
I appreciate your stopping in today to read my poetry. Thanks also for your thoughtful comments on my home page. I look forward to reading more of your work, as well. Seems we have much in common. Take care. Peace, Cyn
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Cyn, what a beautiful piece of rhytm and rhyme! Short, sweet and to the point. Very insightful and I could feel your words taken a part of me with each line ... letting go bit by bit till a full renouncement.
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Thank you!!! I am glad you like my poem!!!
Hi Rachel, I appreciate your stopping in today to read my work, and I look forward to reading more of yours!!! Thanks a bunch for your thoughtful comments and kudos!!! Peace, Cyn
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Honest and direct
"This life of pleasure has been lived in vain," - " ...let my spirit die." These are the thoughts every person has at one time of their life or another. I like honesty in poetry, and you have described the thoughts of one plumbing the depths of despair. Yes I like couplets too, and you've used them so effectively here. Thank you for sharing your talent.
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The darkness comes in heavy and deep in this one.
When hearts reach a point of complete despair.
...darken all starry objects.....
Knowing the light will reveal your tears.
But you forget one thing lassie,
a spirit never dies,
it may wane and wonder,
but it will lift you again,
above the silence
and earth and stars.
It is then you will look down.
And you will smile.
Emotional depth of the human condition in heartbreaking turmoil.
BRAVO GYPSY!
LOWELL
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My lady
A beautiful but sad write. Life and love is not always fair and we, at times do turn away from the light. But your beauty shines thru in this exceptional write
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What an ingenous use of couplets. This was exceptional It crooned in deed and showed a mastery of a form that few poets including myself do not have.
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Thank you, Swan Song!!!
You really made my day!!! I actually wrote this poem with a few more couplets included, but then I decided to make two poems, as some of the intended lines did not fit as well within this particular piece. You won't see those lines here, but I did create another poem using them, entitled, "Reconstrction". If you like you can read that poem here: http://allpoetry.com/poem/4234609
Thank you for your time in reading my work, and I hope you have a great day!!! Peace, Cyn
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Thats a beautiful painting..your words even better. Soaked up every line
Very well written , so poetic
Cindy
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