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~ Love Bite ~ { GOLD }

Uncoiling our springs,

lusts desire,

Peeled fruit softness a centre,

Sweetener sugared her taste,

Lay naked sheds of cotton lace,

Revealing touch stroked,

Sensual's bitten kiss,

Devouring love,

Move closer,

our sways,

mold our sculptures,

Blend,

Unity bounding sung,

lyrical hiss whispered,

of loves trailing vines,

Capturing sounds of ecstasy,

tumbled upon a bed,

Timeless a movement,

Dancing sheets of passions heat,

Unveiled.


 

 

 

 

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~ Snake Bite ~

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  • princess Jewelcat22
    September 24
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    This is very descriptive!! Very Superb!! I love it!!

  • Edna Sweetlove
    August 19
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    Quite amusing I suppose.

  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    August 18

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    Excellent and very very sensual--
    Well done and best of luck in the contest!

  • Swtpoetryman
    June 30

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    A lyrical hiss whispered - to say the least!

    Uncoiling our springs,
    lusts desire,
    Peeled fruit softness a centre,
    Sweetener sugared her taste,
    Lay naked sheds of cotton lace,
    Revealing touch stroked,
    Sensual's bitten kiss,
    Devouring love,
    Move closer,
    our sways,
    mold our sculptures,
    Blend,
    Unity bounding sung,
    lyrical hiss whispered,
    of loves trailing vines,
    Capturing sounds of ecstasy,
    tumbled upon a bed,
    Timeless a movement,
    Dancing sheets of passions heat,
    Unveiled.


    More than worthy of the gold, indeed! That love bite must have not been as bad as it looked! Something tells me that this creature whom you obviously love dearly - and who loves you - just wanted to see if you tasted as sweet as you looked and as you are! Talk about suffering for one's art - only REAL POETS would dare to do that who read and write and look at the world with their all heart and soul - as it is easy to see that you do! I hope that the biter and bitee are both doing well!
    Peace & Love!
    Earl.


  • Abe 1
    June 3

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    OUCH WHO DID THAT TO YA ????????
    Fab as usual and what a gold ! ya sure brought a smile to me face RL
    Sexy alright
    abe


  • imahealer gold member
    May 22

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    This verse flowed superbly. This poem could have only been written by a very sensual writer, who is familiar with snake bites and has a lover who understands every nuance and every personality diversion. Bravo for entering this exquisite poem. Best wishes.

    Shana

  • theredcatjazzoflove gold member
    May 19

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    soothing i like this very well i think you did a very geat job and best wishes to you in the contest hon*rose

    Lady Poetry Jazz

  • midnite wolf silver member
    May 16

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    echoes burried treasuse, very good write, only you could write something like this, lol, good luck in the contest,
    this brought a much needed smile my way.
    x x x


    • Reptile Lady gold member
      May 18
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      sexy snake
      Thanks my darling glad I could bring a smile to your face xxx

  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    May 16
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    Now Julie---Ifr only your Snake Bite experience could have been like this!! ---Seriously, I hope you are Okay!
    Very well written with sensual imagery--
    Well Done & Good Luck in the contest!


    • Reptile Lady gold member
      May 18
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      Thank you for your comment hun
      Had to make light of it all, although an unexpected bite from an escapee and then coiling like he did was rather shocking.
      Lost the poem I was writing!
      Sensual snake, now thats a first, may post this poem into his vivaruium as a reminder hehe xx

  • maralisa silver member
    May 16

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    Unity bounding sung,

    lyrical hiss whispered,

    of loves trailing vines,

    Capturing sounds of ecstasy,

    tumbled upon a bed,

    Timeless a movement,

    Dancing sheets of passions heat,

    Unveiled.wow wonderful Julie you must love the snake good luck in the contest Hun x marinaSmile

  • Nighttime angel
    May 16

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    a snake bite huh Mum.. this doesn't sound like a snake bite to me.. lol I love this poem a lot. you have a wonderful talent that blows my mind. you did an outstanding job with this. I am so proud.

    good luck in the contest

    kat


    • Reptile Lady gold member
      May 18
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      THANK YOU DARLING
      I am simply unique as you know
      A bite becomes a love bite hehe xx

  • onesugar silver member
    May 16

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    What can I say...I am glad I finished mine before I read yours

    I loved the feel to, took me on a beautiful sensual erotic trip.

    Good luck in the contest

    love ~sugar~


  • daviscth silver member
    May 16
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    Julie, only you could make a snake bite sound like this!!!


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    May 16

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    Lovely soft sensuality in this! The words certainly conjure up some imagines!


  • unsigned gold member
    May 16
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    Beautifully done Sis...

    Simon.


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    May 16

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    That was very beautiful writing. I love it. Wonderful deep and very sensual. Lots of imagery here as well Julie. Fantastic piece of work.

    Love
    Wayne Leon

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