sequenced events,
linked,
as train cars,
merging
where our lives
intersect,
switches determined
by chance,
is what our minds
perceive
As time.
Author notes
thinking about time, what it actually may be drives me mad I say..mad!..mad!..MAD! Time prompt 4
A contest entry
- in time by james119.
475 points, ended May 20, 2008, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Its all about the comments by LadyLullaby.
700 points, ended August 11, 2008, 27 entries
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suggestions on rhythm, word choice,allusion,anyway to improve.
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I locve the use of words in this, it shows such depth which could have been lost.
A wonderful write and I wish you all the best in the contest.
Rose
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What great insight,,switches of trains determine what our mide percieves..tiime...I love this analogy and bookmarded this one too.
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Id give you five stars but don't now how.T his poem deserves gold..a lot said in just a few lines.....
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I can see your definition of time in this poem. For myself time doesn't exist. We, as humans, have given a name to a non existant entity. An excellent write.
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Great use of metaphors there ;D
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well
Those switches can at times bring many smiles to our faces and to laugh is a gift from the gods we use not enough
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Had to laugh when reading your author notes. I guess I should never consider to give you a watch as present!
I really liked your definition to time, very clever.
Mari
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nicely done
sequenced, linked, trailing, merging, switches.
Good use of metaphor
good flow strong images.
Thanks for entering
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