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In time

 sequenced events,

 linked,

 as train cars,

 merging

where our lives

intersect,

 switches determined

 by chance,

 is what our minds

 perceive

 

As time.

 

Author notes

thinking about time, what it actually may be drives me mad I say..mad!..mad!..MAD!

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  • rbruce gold member
    May 26
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    I can see your definition of time in this poem. For myself time doesn't exist. We, as humans, have given a name to a non existant entity. An excellent write.


  • xhellovee
    May 25
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    Great use of metaphors there ;D
  • Bob Fox
    May 18
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    well

    Those switches can at times bring many smiles to our faces and to laugh is a gift from the gods we use not enough


  • Gaze silver member
    May 16

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    Had to laugh when reading your author notes. I guess I should never consider to give you a watch as present!
    I really liked your definition to time, very clever.

    Mari


  • james119
    May 16

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    nicely done

    sequenced, linked, trailing, merging, switches.
    Good use of metaphor
    good flow strong images.

    Thanks for entering
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