I hear my people cry,
Do you know what it's like?
To fail?
To be the ones head turn to,
then avoid...
It's different for you, I know
Respect and love are only hindrances;
why waste your time?
Yet, is it so bad to live like us
When we have given so willingly to you?
"Ancient mother,
I hear you calling
Ancient mother,
I taste your tears"
Will it be like this,
Forever?
Will I always
Hear
Dread
Attempt to prevent
My People's Eternal Cries?
Author notes
Eternal Cries
A contest entry
- Way awesome prompt contest. by livia michelle.
500 points, ended May 24, 2008, 5 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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GREAT
Once again I will say that I love the way you write!!!! -
AWESOME!!
ESPECIALLY THE FIRST VERSE... WHERE DID YOU LEARN TO DO THAT... NVM... YOUR A GENUUIS!!
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I like it!
it goes very well with the prompt, and is really good
awesome write & good luck -
wow! really intense. you packed a lot of emotion into this one.
"Ancient mother,
I hear you calling
Ancient mother,
I taste your tears"
powerful lines that somehow remind me of my indian heritage. this piece really moved me.
God bless
Kathryn
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sure?
ok here are your choices::
-I can feel you all around me
-Eternal cries
-Setting myself up for the let down
-Blow me away, I dare you
-Whispering Rain
choose one and put it in your author's notes
hope your inspired
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