Climb out of that pit of misery and despair,
Paste a smile on your face, pretend that you care.
Everyday living, you go through the motions,
Darkness threatens to take over, you brush it aside as silly notions.
Your body is just a shell, you feel dead inside,
Happiness is for others, to yourself you confide.
Nothing you touch ever seems to go right,
You have lost your will to live, your will to fight.
You try to climb out, of that deep dark abyss,
To find a little happiness, just a little bliss.
Slowly but surely, you start to see the light,
You realize the world is not so dark, it really is bright.
Your soul feels lighter than it has in years,
You have crushed the misery, no more need for tears.
One day at a time you just try to live,
No longer consumed with darkness, with nothing to give.
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The poem that is my age 
Written December 21st, 2003
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Nice uplifting ending Aren't you going to say what number your age is
aww c'mon
sarah -
Great work here, for sure I guess everyone has these periods in life sometimes..you think your the onlyone and there never will be light no more......but then your lines come in:
Slowly but surely, you start to see the light,
You realize the world is not so dark, it really is bright.
And you start to live day by day feeling the love and joy around you is there for you too...as long as you keep your eyes, mind and hands open and believe in yourself and your dreams
Good luck in this contest,
XXJeannette -
Good Luck
Well done with this piece my friend. I loved it very much. Good luck in this contest.
Keep writing
Countrybabe
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I agree with everyone else in that we should live life one day at a time, i see so many people always planning things for years to come which in turn puts pressure on themselves as well as the people around them, we need to just live happily and not put so many expectations on ourselves.
Great work Queen
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Yes, a very interesting poem, Queen. It says a lot about life and how we should live it....one day at a time. A very nice write
Good luck in the contest
Dee
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lovely
hm...I like this poem..its got emotions and potntial to make the reader think...the name of the pom itself has a very varied meaning Enlightened Misery...a very intresting and mysteious one! In general the poem is really good! It flows well and is deep! good luck in the contest my frnd..
~~~PREETI~~~
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congratulations
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I like this poem, so much encouragment and hope
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Brilliant write. Love this. Thanks for entering!!
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I know that this s probably meant for a more chronic depression. I get like this too often for my liking. So I can definitly relate to this poem. And yes, you are the rhyming queen.
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I have a friend that fits the dark bits..he doesnt see the light yet. I wish he would. Great descriptions. keep up the spiffyful work
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Pretty good. I like how well you suggest how to get out of the despair.
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Excellent
That is how life should be lived, 'One day at a time'. This is a very encouraging piece. It gives hope to a person in despair. But when someone loses the will to live, they've basically given up on life itself. But when you see the light and realize that life is not as dark as you believe then you have found your way back into a life with reason to live and cope. An excellent write. Good luck in the contest. Avril
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I like it, good choice of words. I like the rhyme scheme and diction.
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Wonderful work
Hi Queen,
Nice write once again. Very uplifting piece. I loved the hopeful outlook the poem had to it. Most pieces on depression end in the dark, but yours ended in the light...you know, I might enter this contest...
-morgana -
This was me until the smile I couldn't pretend for seven years fell in the lake and nearly drowned. I had come to almost at the end of my rope of pretending everything was all right. Then finally seeking therapy. Saddie23
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Yes
This is good. I just wanted to acknowledge that I have read it. I am coming back to add more.
Just so much writing in one day.
You conquer the beast when you speak life. No more lies or stolen time...
I like this.
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Great Job with this poem, i like how you used "you" instead of "I". It's like you were telling all of us how we feel or how we should feel. I especially like the lines:
Nothing you touch ever seems to go right,
You have lost your will to live, your will to fight.
You try to climb out, of that deep dark abyss,
To find a little happiness, just a little bliss.
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I stand amazed.
You have a poetic ability that I have only seen in one other person, ever: the ability to use rhyming couplets without looking like an idiot.
Great job. I like this piece of work because, like SegerFan said, it illustrates the fact that we have a choice to be depressed or not, and that's a choice that not many people know about. Keep up the good work, and good luck to you in the contest!
-Tsurara -
Oh yess.. I really like this one! I used to be depressed until I realized that is a choice. To have hope is also a choice. I've gotten quite deep in that I get such renewed energy and self healing from the simple things I now choose to see...the budding trees, the clouds in the sky, or simply by watching an ant and thinking about its existance.. LOL Life has too many of these awesome beautities in it to loose hope!
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Wow Barb! This is a lot different than your other poems. I hope you are feeling o.k....I love you girl!....I really like this poem though...I like stuff like this.Good job! (Good Luck!)
Tammy33
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If I could double applaud this I would. This is excellent.
TD
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Wow i think this is great...nice rhyming and flow with the choice of words
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this was great and i can relate to it too! Its really great and i enjoyed it so much. I luv the way you can write like this you are so talented its great. Wonderful write
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This is a very, very strong piece. I've been there and back. So this is one i can surely relate to.
I don't know how you do it, but i can never do rhyming poetry. Great write
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