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The Door

Watching as I walk the Hall
Tiled red and Black
The paintings there remind me
Of a creepy little White Rabbit

I walk up to the door
Big and Double hinged
The carvings on it speak to me
The images make me Cringe

And I notice as I listen
Behind the screams of war
I hear a little girl in tears
And once again I look at the door

In the center of the horrible picture
the Dragons and Beast at war
Is a tiny little girl
Who appears to be sitting on the floor

I reach out my hand to save her
To pet her head as she cries
but to my dismay as soon as I touch her
I become the little girl

My hair is Blond my eye's are blue
My dress is torn and burned
The beast and dragons all around me
Fighting filled with scorn

But none ever attack me
For I notice a rabbit hole
and seeing as I'm a little girl
I fit all the way inside it

I hope the bunny is Ok
that used to occupy this hole
and I hope someone will trade me places
Like I did the one before

The red and Black tile I miss
The pictures on the wall I crave
Just a little piece of Sanity
Till than I have to be brave.

I walk Amongst the Dragons now
And pet the mighty beast that rest
I've grown a little since I've come
I now were a mini Dress

I've stoped the fighting
Found the Rabbit
Fixed the House's
And built a Castle

Now I rule
The Queen of Spades
With Black and Red Tile floor
And the White Rabbit by my side.

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Alice in Wonder Land

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  • NyxianaSpades
    November 25, 2008
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    thank you all for the wonderful comments


  • brightsmylesxx
    May 23, 2008

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    This is very good. Is totally captivated me. I could stop reading! Congrats on the well-deserved gold. You definetely did a great job with the prompt. Great job writing this.

    Keep that pen moving!
    ~ Bright Smyles


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    May 22, 2008

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    wow. so captivating. what a way to keep you audiences attention. talk about going from point A to B. very well penned.


  • black hearted rebel
    May 15, 2008

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    Wow!!!!!!!

    I really like this...I was soooo engulfed in this poem...I couldn't stop reading!!!wow!!Thanks for entering!!!


  • queen Moderators member
    May 15, 2008
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    This is very good, i was enchanted all the way through

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