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Arabella & Allyce Meet At The Station





It is dark --
wink of fire sheeted
and they are thrown
like cargo, in motion,
against the fat
of a scrubbed moon;
circle one another,
suspicious, spooked,
buckled one way.

The metal heaves
and shrinks to distance,
points a slick flinger:
an eye-map to single
grey plague.

There is sick
familiarity here --

the mirror is unclothed.






Author notes

Five minute poetry!

I am she and she is me! We're stranded on the same track.

Can you tell I've been drinking? Hee heeeeee hgrbgqieg!

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  • Rowan gold member
    May 28

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    Damn, 'fat of the moon' ... how clever that is. I'm with guy on this, definitely poetry!

  • grm
    May 17

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    still after the presidency of the Drunken Poet's Society is see...lolol

    you should visit some of the train stations here in the US...most of which are named 'Union Station' for some esoteric reason i've yet to fathom.
    the one in Chicago has some great bars and restaurants.

    but this is good stuff...a 100 proof, i'd say


  • Suzanne Dia gold member
    May 16

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    Have I ever mentioned I almost never look in the mirror for more than say ... 5 seconds at a time? Hehe.

    Love this. Write when you drink more often.



    (not that they aren't just as good when you aren't drinking.)




  • Nicolette gold member
    May 16

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    5 min poetry??? I couldn't write something as good as this poem even if I had 5 days, lololol!!

    You are just awesome, Allyce and i love the way you've made trains and stations (btw, i love old steam trains) part of a train of thought - wonderful metaphorical display of talent here - well, also some burps, but if you burp as poetically as this, then i might just forgive you



    great stuff - as always!

    ~ Nicolette


  • ariosto silver member
    May 15
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    oh, the points!

  • ariosto silver member
    May 15

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    Yeah, I could tell.
    maybe peyote even
    in altered states we see things in a different way.
    as usual your images are startling and unique, 'the fat of a scrubbed moon'...wonderful stuff

    but I bet you could still conjure the same if you were only high on iced tea!

    nice

    d


    • Allyce May
      May 15
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      Heh heh, thanks

      I bet I'll wake up in the morning and think WHAT THE?!

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