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A Sweet Indulgence

We, met, had coffee,
Salad, AH, AND THEN DESSERT.
A sweet indulgence,
Giving in to our craving,
For sweetness
And the forbidden.
Something not quite good for “us”,
But Oh, so….  Good.
Like the meeting,
A time when we gave in
to our craving for companionship.
Sharing a moment in time.
A sweet indulgence.

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  • AgnststereotypesX3
    July 10, 2008

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    you people need to stop being modest.
    =]].
    and lady don't start yelling at me for telling the truth.


  • Times Change
    July 7, 2008

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    Graet poem and thank you soo much for posting it on Demented tea lovers...sorry we didn't get to it sooner.


  • Hetha gold member
    May 20, 2008

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    Ahh.. I like this..reminds me of my first time going "out" for coffee at a small cafe, for Turkish coffee and homeade biscotti. I loved it, and I had great company, which helps stimulate the mind. Talk about guilty indulgences, that was the best biscotti bar none, that I ever had..and I'm not giving up the recipe..teehee


  • maralisa silver member
    May 20, 2008

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    A time when we gave in
    to our craving for companionship.
    Sharing a moment in time.
    A sweet indulgence.a great poem I can relate to your words good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing your poem with the group

  • piccola silver member
    May 19, 2008

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    I love the title, it drew me in and the write itself was delicious. Thank you for sharing it with our library. It has that soft sensuality that avoids overt sexuality but flirts with the dangers ... kind of sharing a secret with us. Nice job.


  • CaliOkie silver member
    May 16, 2008

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    Warm and sensual you create just the right level of tension to capture the "sweet indulgence" of a secret rendezvous. Good balance of all the elements, subtle and tasteful, with a wonderful suggestion of forbidden dessert. Very well done.

    Garrison


  • livia michelle
    May 15, 2008

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    it's streamy without being obviously erotic which I think is hard to do, so good job

    it's short but you portay guilty indulgences almost
    perfectly

    awesome write & good luck

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