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What is This!!!

The sun rains
the rain shines
the dogs talk
and humans bark
this must be love
I long for your touch
your kiss, your smile.
When you hold me
I feel weak
I've been here before
but it was a lie
and the pain still lingers
so my dear
I can't be in love
with you yet until...
I know you accept me completly

as I am, go ahead take my hand

prove to me you will love

and not hate!

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  • rooftop-writer
    August 16, 2008

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    Interesting

    Wasn't what I expected, though I like it. Could I perhaps borrow the first two lines? They really intrigue me.


  • Chet W.
    June 16, 2008
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    Great poem, I can relate. I would love some background info though, because I can assume why they can't accept you, but that would be assuming, so message me plz. Great poem anyway. I love the opposing motiffs about the sun raining and etc. Which also makes me assume more about this romance, that it is in opposition with the norm. I know how that is.

  • LadCoberst
    June 10, 2008

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    Wooow. Really cool! As everyone else has been commenting, "sun rains rain shines" that is awesome! It gave me the shivers!


  • Lsh-x
    May 22, 2008

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    Wow, i like how you changed from the Sun shines, to the rain shines, and the sun rains.
    It's great!
    Personally i love it. I'll keep looking at your work, look at mine if you can/want <3

    Good write.

    Laura

  • fillurhands
    May 21, 2008
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    Lovely piece. I really like "The sun rains the rain shines" and people do really "bark". I think I get the metaphor - everything is upside down and backwards when you are in love. Sounds like you just need to be reassured about your loves intentions. Good Job!


  • Rovingone gold member
    May 21, 2008

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    I think I can relate to this. The time when you wonder if it will be different this time. (Sigh), hasn't been for me, but it's always good to think it will be right for someone else.


  • Lovewaits
    May 19, 2008
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    I like this one, it really gets to the point and tells the person whats on their mind.


  • just-alittle-emo
    May 16, 2008

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    nice

    Itnterestign way to get your point across.
    "The sun rains the rian shines the dogs talk and teh humans bark"
    Does this have to do withhow love turns the world upside down?

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