Like the song which springs from the white doves wings,
whistling through the forest trees.
or the violet comb of the thistle blowin’
It’s down into the breeze
There’s a beauty new and it’s born in you,
and a lightness in my soul
days were dull and gray, now they’ve gone away,
and it’s you who makes life whole.
Like a rainbow’s hues on the powder blues
of the skies after the storm.
paints away the gray, turns the summer day
to a scene that’s bright and warm.
every dawn’s inspired all I have desired
and much more, has come to be,
you’re my every dream comin’ true it seems
you are wonderful to me.
Author notes
Yes. I loved a woman very much. And, I still do. Wish it had lasted.
A contest entry
- Love of a Lifetime by Star Shine.
1050 points, ended May 27, 2008, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Have you ever really loved a woman? by Myjoy.
1750 points, ended October 1, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is lovely, Poet. I would suggest NOT capitalizing the first word of every line. Minor issue, but distracting. Congratulations on a well~earned gold.
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Thank you Swanee I think I corrected it. Not sure on the punctuation though.
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Very Good
You did a wonderful job here. I read it several times and it gently came alive for me. Your feelings come through strong and straight from the heart. You paint a picture with words that bring your memories alive in the reader's mind, and we too can appreciate the strength and purity of your feelings.
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An awesome song, light, soft and gentle, full to the brim with overwhelming love. I truly love the wording, the placement of your words and the gentle beat. Well done.
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Oh, you are just too flattering! I can't believe it. I hope you have the longest and most successful of unions and everyday is the best until the next!
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