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This Bleeding Rose


This Bleeding Rose
Accentuates my bleeding heart .
You tore me apart.
You made me bleed .
You gave me love only to
Ruthlessly
Snatch it away and replace it with
Your anger for my
Obsession
With you.

This Bleeding Rose
Stands for my love.
Slowly dripping away with each time you
Draw blood from me.
Draining me of feelings.
Filling me with
Hate.
Resentment.
Numbness.

This Bleeding Rose
Turns Black.
As my feelings for you
Darken.
As my anger for you
Gathers.
The petals fall away leaving me
Naked.
Exposed.
Waiting for you to see my
Hurt.
Waiting for you to see my
 Hardened Heart.

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  • mrs. random silver member
    May 19

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    Wow
    The bleeding Rose...what an imaginative title and topic for a poem. I love how you give something so simple, beautiful, and deep on to the level of something filled with angst and sorrow. Well done

    Mylee

  • toomysterious
    May 17

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    Excellent

    This is very good. I like the staccato setup with single words falling from the lines above like the petals from the rose. You begin with a single theme and follow through until the end. Emotionally it is superb, also.


  • Argon1442
    May 15

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    This was a really great piece, i really loved how you used individual words which really added to this piece. i also loved the ending there you used the hardened heart with the changing colors somewhat like the bleeding rose.