Once I wrote a lot of rhyme.
I used to write it all the time,
a rhyme in meter sounds sublime.
Critics came along one day
who said that form with rhyme's passé,
religion, love and such, cliché.
Novice, heed a wiser word,
professors speak, they must be heard;
find fun in poetry? Absurd!
Not for play, no sense in that.
A critic's not a Cheshire cat,
a joke without a smile is flat.
Now the verse I write is free,
and poems seldom come to me.
Author notes
St.George's sonnet: four rhyming triplets and a rhyming couplet, all iambic tetrameter, first lines acephalic.
A contest entry
- St George's Sonnets. by cricketjeff.
1000 points, ended May 27, 4 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think.
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Liked this poem, rhythm, rhyme, flow and thoughts you share in these lines - interesting form as well. NIce to see different forms as well as the regular popular ones all the time. COngratulations on taking gold!
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Thank you for your kind comment and applause, grannyeri.
It is nice to try a new form, and use it when the material fits easily.
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It's a rare poet who can make a serious point so humorously, and who can do it in an unfamiliar form. A well-deserved gold.
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Thank you for the invention, contest, appreciation and applause Mairi. The familiarity of the form is immaterial if one has a clear description of it. Thanks for the trophy, I'm happy that you were pleased.
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As the biggest fan of rhyme on AP point me at the critics and I'll fix your problem
Funny well rhymed and in the form,
Excellent.
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Thank you Jeff. One of your opponents is Lyndon (bless his heart) who questioned why I was writing in the style of the 19th and 20th centuries. Neoclassicism finds little support in publication; however we may enjoy the old poets, new ones are not as welcome.
I have tried both form and free verse, now I am tired.
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Rhyme and flow are not the tools of the 19th or 20th Century they are parts of our minds, Shakespeare and the Bible are quoted all day every day by the most extreme believers in Free Verse.
That is not to say that FV isn't beautiful and worth reading. I have just read and commented on who I consider to be the most extraordinary poet on site but it is very rare to be able to write memorable words without considering the musicality of them.
The best read and best pais poets in the world today are writing rhyme and flow, and reciting it to audiences of tens of thousands to the accompaniment of loud discordant music. There ain't no FV rappers
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Keep that passion, Jeff, write it.
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Try stopping me!!!
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I am mostly writing fee verses too, but from time to time I have a rhyme attack, although I am not a form poetry fan. With this one you showed your hidden possibilities. It is nice written as well as funny. Good luck on your rhyming lane run..
~Sonja~
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It's really funny Sonja - for a while I wrote rhymes exclusively; but the trend of acceptability is free verse only and the fewer words the better. Paradoxically, the free verse poet is not free to write just anything. So there you have it, form again - which matters more, how we write, or what we say?
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Yes, I agree with you. Sometimes when poem contains only a few words with no any certain meaning, with only few puzzles of picture, most of readers think they must say how it is cool or nice because they don't want to be the only who do not understand it . Oh! This is the kind of human's vanity. In my modest opinion it is much more important what we say, even if it is written on the edge of used napkin. And how we write? Rhyme or not? It doesn't matter. Some poems are better rhymed, some not. Sometimes they are great combined rhyme/free style/prose. Some people are thinking that whatever they put on the paper could be called poetry... sigh... The most important is if poet could transfer her/his feelings to readers. When I reading a poem I must see it and feel it. If after a few lines it becomes boring, I can't read it anymore, but maybe somebody else would enjoy. Maybe its all about reader's taste? Am I too sharp judge? Maybe I am. But, that's me.
~Sonja~
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