Memories hidden
trapped inside
Flashes of
screaming...red!
Lost to myself
Pulling...dividing
never whole
Familar voice's
recognition unreachable
Answers lay silent
Images stabbing
exploding torture
Metal anguish
lingering hostility...
essential revenge!
Author notes
"No one will take away what I never had"
Option:titles-(a)Mirrored Enigma
darlintlc
A contest entry
- 3 Options: Titles/Quotes/Song Inspired by Re-invention.
1350 points, ended June 18, 2008, 27 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Hit me with your best shot by MYsecondchance.
330 points, ended June 13, 2008, 34 entries
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Comments
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The poem begin to become more powerful by reading from the first to the last line, indeed. I'd like to thank the fact you did the capitalization thing because without the periods, I would think this was a run-on sentence
They're still needed, though ^^'
Anyway, I like how the persona described the thoughts behind the chosen prompt and all
Flashes of screaming, pulling . . . dividing and all that: marvelous, letting the reader understand the persona's rage and hmm, strong melancholy?
Good piece, a dark impact too great for just the reader's eyes
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Nice work.... YOur fiend in Poetry... JackReed3...
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i like this thanx for entering my contest
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WOW, This is very poignant! I love this piece! So much emotion and intensity from start to finish and the picture did it justice GREAT WRITE! Thank you so much for commenting on mine. You are a very talented poet and I intend on continuing to read as much as you write! Sara
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Thanks on your comment on "Mirrored Enigma"
I just loved that pic.
Glad you enjoyed it.
darlintlc
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Very dark and powerful. Great take on the prompt.
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Thanks for your comment on "Mirrored Enigma"
darlintlc
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powerful AND deep.. the descriptive way o an entrapt soul seems to be perfect here.. wonderful! thanks for entering!
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Thanks for commenting on "Mirrored Enigma" this contest came at the right time...as I'm in a dark mood.
Best of luck with the contest
darlintlc
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Wonderful, powerful piece this is. More please. I liked this a lot. The darkness is deep.
Love
Wayne Leon
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Thanks for commenting on "Mirrored Enigma" I glad you liked it. Coming from you it means alot as I think you're a great writer. As for me I'm just getting warmed up! ha!
darlintlc
xxxxoooo
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