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Forever Burning

It's too cold when I don't hold your hand

It's too painful when we say goodbye

Wicked lies whispered at my doorway

& I'm scared you'll see the tears I cry

 

But our love has held strong

Through the harshness of secrets

Our love carries on

Through the tyranny of their hatred

 

Forever burning with a passionate fire

Fighting through their caustic hopeleseness

Our love helplessly entwined forever

My heart's in joy, but my mind protests

 

They try very hard

To drag us down

But they'll always regret

Messing with us around


No amount of their

Liquid toxin of hate
Will extinguish our burning love

It's not too late

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title option: FOREVER BURNING

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  • Technicolor
    May 17, 2008

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    Very good poem, I can relate to this quite well. I was apathetic to the first bit, but later on it became quite good. I have to say, I loved stanza 3, but the opening in stanza 1 was.. meh. I didn't love it, but it wasn't horrible.

    Good effort and good luck!