Twisting minds
with a single smile.
Fingers twitch,
they run for miles.
Beauty enraptures
each passing figure.
Diamond blue eyes encompass,
and sparkle with vigour.
Abundantly rigourous,
she hunts her victims, no compassion.
Dominates and subordinates,
easy to please when for victim to fashion.
Inspiring crimes,
persuasive tools equiped.
Whisper insanity,
with luxurious lips.
Imposing intentions,
the vixen implores.
Stare down to devotees
never showing remorse.
Author notes
For all my dark prewrites,
I took too much time.
So instead I will spread maleficus
thoughts of mine!
I hope you enjoy me
spinning up a quick rhyme.
Hopefully you will see
these typed thoughts
as sublime....
I did want to enter a prewrite, but this must suffice.
Wonderful luck with the contest
A contest entry
- Darkwrite Extravaganza Season II, Round I by Immortal Obscurity.
400 points, ended May 19, 2008, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critique Me!!! (No unecessary bashing, please.)
Comments
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To be honest, I thoroughly enjoyed the read. Your language was captivating, and while I normally loathe rhyme, I have to say that it was done well here. Keep this up, and you bet your ass you'll be battling it out to the very end. Well done, and good luck!
Laura x
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